critique my MIT essay

College Essays
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<p>I did prompt B: Most of the focus is on my resentment of false multiculturalism (plural monoculturalism), and my desire to form cultural bridges.</p>

<p>I am worried about several things, especially its focus, since I tried to stick to the word limit, and chose not to concentrate on explaining my activities -- I referred to some of them tangentially -- I plan to use the description part of my application for that instead. Can someone read it and tell me what they think? </p>

<p>P.S. (is 530 "keeping to the limit"?)</p>

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<p>I'll read it
and try really hard to get to 500.</p>

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<p>I'll read it if you tell me what Prompt B is...</p>

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<p>Prompt B is a description of the world you come from, for example, your family, school, community etc and how it has shaped your dreams and aspirations</p>