Critique need on common app essay? Please? With a cherry on top?

<p>I would really be grateful if someone read my essay and offered constructive criticism. Ill PM it write over. Please and Thank You!</p>

<p>Happy new year!!!
Any takers on the essay?</p>

<p>I understand the desperation at this point lol
I’d be happy too, would you mind critiquing my amherst supplement essay?</p>

<p>I was going to oblige but then I saw the last part. Yuck, i hate cherries :D</p>