<p>Okay, for essays about culture, how much information do you want to give a reader about what your talking about? Because it seems like too much detracts from the essay but too little can leave a reader confused.</p>
<p>My essay is about this traditional fighting dance in my culture and showing how I had the spirit of it even as a little girl. I'm comparing it to a Halloween parade from second grade. (It sounds kind of wierd but don't ask how, but I like how it works.) Do you think my idea is okay? It's addressing something that I accomplished in a weird way. Thanks :)</p>
<p>Sounds okay. Just make sure that someone who has no idea about what the hell this is can understand what this dance is. Just don't go overboard. This essay is about you; not the dance.</p>
<p>The fighting dance essay sounds like an interesting idea, especially if--as asdfjkl1 suggests--you make sure it's about YOU and doesn't sound like an encyclopedia entry describing the dance itself. Your comparison to the Halloween parade seems promising --not something you're likely to find in the encyclopedia. :) </p>
<p>If your cultural heritage is a part of your life, it can be helpful to remind admission officials in your essay that you will bring it to campus with you and, presumably, share it with others.</p>