I’m beginning to draft my common app essay, and want to include an anecdote from some hospital shadowing I’ve done. The story is about a woman who was in the ER for 14 hours w/o medical attention, and the doctor called her a “b****”. I am planning on applying to top schools. Will including this quote worsen my chance at admission?
Well, it certainly won’t improve your chances. If you get rejected, you may always wonder why you got rejected. If you use a non-offensive synonym, that’s one reason you can cross off your list.
You can also search these forums.This question has been asked many many times. e.g.
http://talk.qa.collegeconfidential.com/college-essays/1914071-cursing-in-essay-p1.html
Not an expert, but I agree with @skieurope. If you can find a workaround that doesn’t compromise your voice and the tone of the essay it might be safer but it’s ultimately up to you. A friend of mine is using one in his essay and it seems like a risky choice but it certainly fits his voice so it could pay off.
The essay should be about you, be personal, unique and interesting. Its not a story about a women in the ER. If it truly doesn’t add to who you are find another way to express the situation. You have little time in the first 2 paragraphs to make an impression. Don’t waste that time.
Just use “b:$&$” if it is crucial for the story you are trying to tell. I don’t think it is a big deal but who am I.