Does anyone want to trade essays?

<p>Or you can just read mine. Anyhow, i am a poor writer, my idea's okay, but not as descriptive as i would like. This is my first draft, i just typed it up in about a half hour. I using it for my common application essay. Any help would be greatly appreciated.
Thanks in advance.</p>

<p>If you still need help, go ahead. I'll pm you with mine later, I'm not quite done with it.</p>

<p>I'll trade you if you want :).</p>