Ah… don’t copy that. Not a winner, especially the repeated use of the same adjective.
@intparent There was an ulterior motive, it wasn’t my point. I don’t know about you, but to copy something in this situation could be called plagiarism.
Don’t hijack the thread.
I don’t think that’s a good idea. A college essay should be about something that affected you deeply, usually in a good way.