Emory Supplement - advice please?

<p>I wrote my Emory Supplement short response essay today and I was wondering if anyone would be willing to read it and/or give advice on how I can make it better. If you're willing to read it, please PM me or email me at <a href="mailto:slowdances@gmail.com">slowdances@gmail.com</a>. Only non-Emory applicants please.</p>