I’m taking the SAT, along with the essay, for the first time on Saturday. I didn’t study before taking the PSAT, and only got a 1210 (to be fair, I was pretty tired when I took it). I’ve since improved on timed practice tests, but I’ve only just started practicing for the essay. I timed myself doing the first two practice essays by hand, and I entered the second one (didn’t manage to finish the first) into the computer-grader on Khan Academy, and it said that it was a 3/1/4 score, which is pretty fair IMO. I want some human feedback, though.
NOTE: Even as I was writing it, I knew I could’ve improved some parts; I just didn’t have time to go back and change them.
Anyway, here it is:
In “Beyond Vietnam - A Time to Break Silence”, Martin Luther King Jr. argues that the Vietnam War is morally unjust. By pointing out that it took focus away from the poor, sent blacks to die fighting for rights they themselves were denied, and the fact that violence is not a good way to improve society, he effectively argues his point.
Martin Luther King Jr. states that the war was taking focus away from helping the poor. He says that it “seemed as if there was a real promise of hope for the poor-both black and white-through the poverty program”, but the “buildup in Vietnam” crushed those hopes. He then states that the government treats the poor’s wellbeing like an “idle political plaything”, showing how insignificant the government thought the issue was. Finally, he calls the war a waste of resources that could be used to benefit society instead of destruction.
Next, King points out the cruel irony of black soldiers dying in the name of a country that oppressed them. He states that “we were taking the black young men who had been crippled by our society and sending them…to guarantee liberties in Southeast Asia which they had not found in southwest Geroga and East Harlem”, giving perspective of the sheer ludicrousness of the situation. Building on this, he brings up the fact that despite black and white people not being allowed to live together, they were expected to fight and die in the war together. By bringing this up, he strengthens his argument.
Finally, Martin Luther King uses the classic idea that violence shouldn’t be used to solve problems to further argue why the war was unjust. Speaking with ghetto residents, he advised them that nonviolence was always the best method for political progress. This brought up the fact that the government, the people who should know best, use violence to solve problems as shown with the war. He then states that the US government is the biggest perpetrator of violence in the modern world.
By bringing up the fact that the poor were neglected, oppressed black people were expected to fight for their racist nation, and the fact that the government was using violence in an attempt to solve an issue, Martin Luther King Jr. argues why the Vietnam War is immoral and unjust.