<p>Hello fellow CCers! I received my first SAT score for the January test and noticed how my essay score (9) should/could improve when I go to war with the SAT in one week. The grammar section was great (-2), but it was the essay score that brought down my overall Writing score. Thus, I've been composing essays on the past SAT prompts in the most SAT-like ambience. I hope you can score the essay out of 12 and point out places to do better on. Tips and advice are immensely appreciated. Thank you for your time in advance!</p>
<p>Prompt: Should people take more responsibility for solving problems that affect their communities or the nation in general? </p>
<p>"Ask not what your country can do for you-- ask what you can do for your country." This famous axiom by John F. Kennedy reflects upon the responsibilities of the people as citizens of a country. Most people believe that the government is indifferent to their opinions and expect the government to satiate the people's needs by solving each problems-- which is an extremely arduous task for the government. The government is definitely incapable of covering and solving every issue of the people; therefore, the government necessitates the people to take responsibility and to speak up to the government regarding their needs. Two compelling events from the 1950s U.S.A depict that with the people's responsibilities against racial segregation, the government will respond and try its best to fulfill the needs of the people. </p>
<p>The Little Rock 9 incident from Little Rock, Arkansas portrays an immense change in racial segregation. All public school during the 1950s abolished segregation when enrolling students. However, Little Rock high school simply ignored the policy and denied the enrollment of 9 black students. Fortunately, the 9 students were fully aware of their rights and remonstrated to the government regarding Little Rock high school's racial segregation. Despite of President Eisenhower's occupied state due to foreign affairs during the time, he expressed gratitude towards the 9 students for notifying such discrimination. Moreover, he sent 10 well-trained soldiers to guide the 9 students into Little Rock high school safely. Little Rock high school eventually apologized to the 9 students and has abolished it's racial segregation when enrolling students ever since. Thus, without the strong appeal of the 9 black students to the government, numerous black students may not have been able to receive education from Little Rock high school.</p>
<p>In addition, the Brown v. Board of Education case from Kansas similarly depicts the success of the people over racial segregation. Linda Brown was a black girl who had to spend 2 hours walking to her "black school," while there was a school located half of a mile away from her home. The neighboring school justified it's denial of Linda Brown with the Plessy v Ferguson case asserting that it is not racial segregation as long as equal education is provided to the black students. However, Linda's parents knew that Kansas was being preposterous, so they appealed to the Supreme Court Earl Warren-- Supreme Court Justice-- found the appeal to be indubitably valid, thus, obliterated the previous decision regarding the Plessy v Ferguson case. Eventually, Linda Brown and her fellow black students were able to attend the neighboring school. Without Brown's appeal, numerous black students would have had to walk two hours everyday to receive education, when they could have just walked ten minutes. </p>
<p>In conclusion. by scrutinizing the two appeals from the 9 black students and the parents of Linda Brown and the government's satiating response, people should take more responsibility for solving problems affecting themselves. The government appreciates it.</p>