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<h2>Can you grade this essay and give me some advice on how to improve. </h2>

<h2>Do incidents from the past continue to influence the present?</h2>

<p>The past supplies a plethora of precedents that are applicable in the modern world. Although it is a pedestrian statement to say that it best to forget the past and move on, it is vital that we learn from the past so we do not suffer from the mistakes already made.
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During post world war two, the countries at war were torn apart and faced immense challenges such as debt and demolished infrastructure. It was at this climax when America had to decide if it should stay and assist in reconstruction. To reach a decision, President Truman studied events similar to the one he was in at the moment. For example, he analyzed post world one, when America felt that it was best to leave the war-broken countries on their own to solve their problems. However, this policy of isolating America from foreign affairs caused the other countries to be taken advantage of by ruthless dictators. For example, Hitler, a merciless anti-semitist, took over Germany, and Mussolini, a fascist totalarian, gained control of Italy. As truman analyzed these events, he found it evident that American help in reconstruction is required to acheive world peace. Once America actively got involved in foreign affairs in post world war two, the outcomes appeared more promising. For instance, Japan was converted from a fascist country to a safe democratic capitalist nation. Furthermore, Turkey and Greece receives enough aid from America To fight off communists, who wanted to undermine the government. By studying the past, America was able to help struggling nations become thriving and economically sound.
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To sum, the folly of a modern world would be to not study the past because it is evident tht the past makes up our future. If we chose to ignore the past, we will make the same mistakes repetitively.</p>

<p>bump iiiiii</p>

<p>Would be an 8 if it were longer because of limited analysis. Maybe even as low as a 6 because it’s so skimpy.</p>

<p>I would also agree with 8 at tops. The first advice would be general organization. Your examples sort of run together so that it gives the feel of just one example, although I know you mention several things. However, just mentioning is not enough to be considered a developed idea/example. It would be better to clearly isolate your examples by giving each a paragraph, and going a bit more in depth with each one rather than a listing of examples. Also remember that although this is graded as a first draft essay, it’s better to show a bit more analysis by showing why and how, not just what happened. I think you could easily turn this content into a 10 with a bit more work, i.e. a bit more detail in the right places and better organization.</p>