Essay: Georgia Tech's motto is: "Progress and Service." What does that mean to you?(150 words)

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I believe service leads to progress. Living in North India where during winters, it becomes excruciatingly cold leading to death too, I made humble beginnings. Last year, I saved my pocket money over the year, to help the unprivileged during winter. I alone couldn’t achieve great success but my efforts motivated my family and friends to contribute too. This year we purchased around 500 blankets, went to rural areas surrounding my city and distributed blankets to the shivering homeless there. Seeing the relief on their faces gave us enormous gratification. I had started alone but eventually others joined in to support me in this noble cause.
These experiences have enriched my life in many ways. At Georgia tech too, I would like to ensure that my commitment to community is continued by becoming an active member of student associations such as “Act of Kindness” and “Habitat for Humanity”

can any one help

It’s not a good idea to post your essay online. Someone could copy it.

The essay is well written!

However, it’s not clear what PROGRESS means to you?
You say service leads to progress, HOW?
You definitely do a lot of community service, but how does that bring about your progress?

These were a few questions that came to my mind after reading your essay.

Didn’t the deadline pass already

The deadline was January 10th, 2015. Sorry if you were unable to submit by then