Essay needing critique - mental health topic

<p>Okay, having seen the raging debate over mental health mentions in essays, I'm asking to have mine looked over. I'm a UK student, so I'm not entirely aware of how to write an essay for colleges, and I'm applying for transfer. The prompt was 'tell us something about yourself that helps the committee to better understand you' and I was told it was a good idea to fess up to the severe clinical depression I had last term, and thus explain my poor performance. I did so. </p>

<p>Help? Any takers to read it?</p>

<p>I'll read it. PM it to me.</p>