Essay Time, again

<p>Essay time! Will yall' please score my essay? :) Thanks in advance!</p>

<p>"Do people learn who they are only when they are forced into action? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations."</p>

<pre><code> Heroes come in all shapes and sizes, from Spider-Man and the whole group of X-men to the leaders that have influenced my life, my teachers. It is in times of crises that people take off their regular clothes and emerge as the people that show no visible fear, no unrelenting doubt, and no hints of selfishness-our heroes.
From the realm of marvelous fiction, Hester, the focal character in Hawthorne’s classic novel The Scarlet Letter, is in every aspect a mundane girl in the colonial period of America, except for the fact that she committed the most nefarious sin of all-adultery and was pregnant in effect. Though pregnant with Dimmesdale’s baby, she refuses to give the name of Pearl’s, her daughter, paternal side. Hester is the heroine of this work of literature because she keeps her promises, no matter if he Boston community forces her to wear the symbol of adultery or not. She is shaken of what could happen. She stays robust and strong for Pearl. She has to be strong.
In relation to myself, my patient care instructor at my school caught the attention of the class as she continued her story of her experience in utilizing CPR, which we were learning for the third time. To me, she always struck me, bluntly, as banal. It was through her application of her medical techniques and random acts of kindness that didn’t alter the way she was boring-it changed the way that I looked up at her.
Historically, heroes are found in ordinary times. One was during World War II, during the infamous reign of Hitler and his Holocaust. The gentle Jewish people, of whom did nothing in the wrong, were exterminated based on the religion they piously practiced. Through it may not seem like it, they were forced to be heroes-they were able to stand as an example of the evilness of dictators, but most of all to represent the glimmer of hope and survival in mankind.

All in all, heroes really don’t even realize they are extraordinary people. Even after they are forced to accomplish what no one has. It is with a sense of themselves and the kindness they spread that they carry themselves, as unknown heroes.
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<p>9-10 I liked it.</p>

<p>i say 9
confused with your grammar in some areas</p>

<p>A little to wordy, and the grammar is not so good in some areas and is quite often awkward. I'd say an 8, but definitely no lower.</p>

<p>Oh, ok...lol. I guess it wasn't "up to par" as my other ones. What should I work on. It seems as if my scores keep going down on the essay.</p>

<p>I would say keep some time at the end like 3-4 min to go back and reread what you already wrote. it will help you find errors...I did that on the January 28 sat and I found errors that I overlooked</p>

<p>Hmm...ok. It's just that I'm having trouble having trouble getting it barely in the 25 minutes (5 mins/paragraph). So in the end I think I had like 1 minutes or 2 for proofreading. I know that somethings were akward, but I mean I was pressured, as is everyone else.</p>

<p>sure thing man..It took me a good 5min to start my essay for the jan 28 essay! when they said go and I read my prompt..I started cussing all over in my mind at collegeboard. :)</p>

<p>LMFAO!!!! It is the history example that gets me....I just write write write...</p>

<p>nice reference to the Scarlet Letter...good job ;)</p>

<p>thanks imacrazyscientist, and all!</p>

<p>I'm not posting this because I don't want your opinions or am contradicting your opinions, or I'm trying not to at least because I thank you for taking the time to do so. I do want your opinions. Recently, I went to Barnes and Nobles, and I read a 4 essay, and it seems like a LOT less work than I put in. Would mine reasonably be a 10? It very well maybe an 8 I guess though because yall' know better I guess.</p>

<p>around a 10.</p>