Essay

Colleges and Universities A-Z University of Chicago ✅
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<p>So it's not that I'm a slow writer or anything, but I wrote like ten drafts for the common app essay and scrapped them all, but I came up with one that I like and I was wondering if anyone would take a look at it. It's only the first paragraph, and I know it's not the UofC one specifically, but I like ya'll and trust you guys to give me the best constructive criticism etc etc. </p>

<p>Anyways, if you want, I can pm it to you. One of my main concerns with what I have so far is wordiness. I like description and sometimes I get a little carried away. Like one of my sentences uses a disgusting amount of alliteration, although I still giggle when I get tongue-tied trying to read it xD </p>

<p>Anywho, would anyone be interested? Also, I'm not sure if it's as focused as it should be. I had another paragraph before that, but I felt it was too blah and only held my writing back, and that it was sharper without it...so yeah, without further ado, feel free to reply :]</p>

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<p>oh man. I went through multiple essays too, but I’m back at square one for the common app. So much for starting early. I feel like being done in one month is a quickly diminishing dream. </p>

<p>PM it over litlhurry, I hope we’ll both make it through!</p>

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<p>Alliteration is great! Kyle says keep the alliteration (unless it does really hurt your essay). I like to randomly add alliteration to my writing and conversations. It entertains me. (Arg, I probably should have added alliteration to this post, but I’m too tired to think :D)</p>

<p>Anyway, I would help revise your essay, but I am also a 2014 applicant so you probably don’t want my opinion. Good luck!</p>

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<p>Full disclosure: I am a '14er applying to UChicago EA.</p>

<p>That said, PM me. I’ll read it.</p>

<p>And I like alliteration way too much too…</p>

<p>Check my post history to see if you feel comfortable sending me your essay.</p>

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<p>Sent guys! Anyone else?</p>