Feedback on my Comm App essay

<p>I would like to get some people two cents on my common application essay. It's main three interest hobby, why transfer, and additional information passage. I've proofread it several times and it's tiring....</p>

<p>I also have a college supplement if anyone is interest!</p>

<p>I am tired. Even this post need proofreading…</p>

<p>PM Me, I’d love to read it (give feedbacK)</p>

<p>PM it over :)</p>