<p>Apps are done, but I was rather iffy about my personal statement. I'm thinking it's a unique topic for a college admissions essay, but other people told me it was risky and would show me in a negative light. I'd love to have anonymous opinions on it, just for kicks. </p>
<p>What’s your topic? My dad (who was an english professor) says that he enjoyed reading risky essays because it showed that person was willing to put themselves out there. HOWEVER not everyone feels that way. Cussing in your essay is really not recommended but you didn’t mention that. Taking risks usually helps you out in the end. Good Luck getting in! If you want to private message me it I could always give you feedback! (I’m senior and have already been accepted).</p>
<p>I’d love to read and give some feedback. PM me!</p>
<p>I’ll read it.</p>
<p>I’ll read it! </p>
<p>I’d be glad to take a look.</p>
<p>Generally with personal statements, it’s essential that you distinguish yourself from the typical “soldier-student” who has the decent GPA and SAT and nothing else to show for themselves. Personal statements, for me, were where I could express my ECs and passions in an informal piece of writing. Not only will this bolster your overall app, but also distance you from the bunch of “so liek, in 8th grade, i won dis award for speling, n then in 9th grade, i won it agen!!!” writers who have nothing but studying to write about.
Another tip is to not overdo your essay with crap you don’t know about or genuinely care about in hopes of impressing the admissions officers- e.g. through the early ages of my childhood, I have always been compelled by the sacred philosophical musings of C.G. Jung, the Swiss philosopher who advocated the process of individuation as a arch-support to the development of young minds through an innate ability to self-differentiate the soul from…blah, blah, blah.
You get the point.
Instead, write something like:
“As my fingers caressed the familiar surface of a B# an octave higher than I could possibly ever sing, I was reminded of Signore Lecter, who once set a failing A Capella singer on her path to performing Ravel in Carnegie Hall.”</p>
<p>But yeah, I’d be happy to take a glance at your statement and see what can be improved (you can PM me or something)!</p>