Feedback on UMich Supplement Essay (Will review back)

College Essays
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<p>I'm looking for some criticism on my essay. I'd be more than happy to do the same for you.
The topic is:</p>

<p>Everyone belongs to many different communities and/or groups defined by (among other things) shared geography, religion, ethnicity, income, cuisine, interest, race, ideology, or intellectual heritage. Choose one of the communities to which you belong, and describe that community and your place within it. (Approx 250 words) </p>

<p>My particular essay is about my experiencing backpacking in Istanbul I then go on to talk about the juxtaposition between poor and rich in the city and then transition to how I am an entrepreneur with a dream of helping the world develop. Just post here and I'll PM it to you and you can do the same to me. Thanks!!</p>

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<p>Sure I’d love to be of assistance :slight_smile: send away!</p>

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<p>I love to read the essay for you! :)</p>

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<p>i would like to read it.</p>

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<p>I would like to read it.</p>

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<p>send away! bump</p>

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<p>I would like to read it</p>

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<p>Would love to take a look. Send it over</p>