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<p>Prompt: In her novel Sense and Sensibility, Jane Austen wrote, "It is not time or opportunity that is to determine intimacy. Seven years would be insufficient to make some people acquainted with each other, and seven days are more than enough for others." Now Austen may have been writing somewhat tongue-in-cheek, for she attributes these sentiments to the excessively romantic Marianne Dashwood, whose extreme sensibility or emotional susceptibility gets its comeuppance by the novel's end. Nonetheless, the point that young Miss Dashwood makes is valid. No amount of time spent in another person's company can guarantee that the two of you will become friends.</p>

<p>ASSIGNMENT: What are your thoughts on the idea that neither time nor opportunity can determine intimacy? What causes two people to become friends? </p>

<p>ESSAY:</p>

<p>The duration of time spent together does not matter, but the quality and circumstances do. A melange of adultresses in literature shows that friendship between two people is the product of an instant connection, no matter the length of time. Also, as a student, I have spent at least four years with most of my classmates. However the length of time of each encounter is equal, I have only become good friends with a few.</p>

<pre><code> Edna Pontellier, Emma Bovary, and Anna Karenina are all women who committed adultery while married. All three have been married to their husbands for quite a long time, but have not developed relationships of great passion with them. However, when they have chance encounters with their lovers, the women were instantly attracted. The husbands of Anna Karenina and Edna Pontellier both hold upper echelons of society; the wives of these men lived rich lives, their economic appetite satiated. Therefore, one can say that money or possessions do not necessarily create intimacy, as doesn't the length of time spent together. From the events of these three adultresses' lives, one can infer that friendship and intimacy is induced by momentary sparks and instant attractions. In other words, fate-- something that an individual cannot control.

From personal experience, both fate and common interest have fueled and initiated deep friendships. This phenomena is represented at every high school, work place, and other public environments. Take high schools for an example. Out of the average 1000 students who attend public schools, why do they all not share the same level of intimacy even though they spend the same time together? The reason is the second important requirement for initiating intimate friendships: common interest. It is obvious that two people are more likely to talk and converse if they share a common interest; a good example is sports teams that allow people who all love and are passionate about a sport to congregate and enjoy each other's company.

In conclusion, the strength of a relationship does not directly vary with the length of time. Other factors, such as fate and common intrest, play a stronger role in creating friendships.
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<p>THANK YOU!! please score and comment on what i did well, what i can do better, what not to do anymore...THANKS AGAIN!!</p>

<p>by the way, i filled up both sides of the ONE PAGE of available writing space that Barron’s provided…i kind of ran out of space and had to smush the last sentence into the line.</p>

<p>will probably consider writing smaller on the test.</p>