Grade my 1st ACT practice essay?

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<p>Hello, I am starting to prepare for the ACT and today I did a practice writing prompt from an ACT prep book. It's really bad but I'd appreciate any comments and tips, thanks!</p>

<p>Prompt: In some states, legislators have debated whether teenagers should be required to maintain a “C” grade average in school before receiving a driver’s license. Some people think this would be a good policy because having passing grades show that students are responsible enough to be good drivers. Other people think such a policy would not be appropriate because they see no relationship between grades in school and driving skills. In your opinion, should teenagers be required to maintain a “C” average in school before receiving a driver’s license?</p>

<p>For many teenagers, obtaining a driver’s license is an exciting mark of freedom and adulthood. However, some students may be barred from this experience since legislators in some states are considering requiring students to maintain a C average. While this policy may seem unfair, this requirement only benefits teenagers in many ways.
Teenagers who do poorly in school are not responsible enough to own a driver’s license. Often times, poor grades are an indicator of an “I don’t care” attitude, and not an indicator of the student’s true ability. That attitude is not what a person who is driving should have. Carelessness can be extremely dangerous on the road. Limiting the amount of careless teenagers on the road can prevent accidents.
Students who are not doing their best in school may see the C average requirement as a source of motivation to improve their grades. Formerly bad students may work hard to get good marks so they can get their license. From this, all students gain a sense of accomplishment from their studying and hard work. Students also will develop a good work ethic.
People may say that there is not relationship between driving skills and grades in school, and while that may be true, requiring teenagers to put effort and hard work for their license can teach a valuable lesson. Those who do not work to improve their grades obviously are not responsible enough to be driving anyway, so this makes everybody safer. </p>

<p>Yeeeahh... not the best thing I've written... <em>cringes</em></p>

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<p>OKAY, but needs work. Structure, transitional sentences, examples and keeping focus on the subject matter will greatly improve your scores. All things being equal, a sore of (5/12 or 6/12) will seem fare.
Best of luck.</p>

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<p>It’s alright. I think you could add more length to it and details.</p>