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<p>Prompt: In some high schools, administrators have limited students to participating in a maximum of two school-sponsored extracurricular activities each semester. Advocates believes that over-extended students lack sufficient time after school to devote to homework. Other educators disagree, arguing that extracurricular activities offer students vital experience and opportunities to explore interests. In your opinion, should schools limit the number of school-sponsored extracurricular activities? </p>
<p>My essay:
An epidemic has taken over the students in America. Sleep-deprived students barely make it through a school day as they function on the previous night's three cups of coffee. There is only so much that can be accomplished in a 24-hour day, but students relentlessly test their limits and sanity. Administrators have limited students to participating in a set number of activities. This decision could possibly be one of the best decisions that schools have made. Schools should limit the number of school-sponsored activities to help students make better choices and lead a a healthier lifestyle. </p>
<p>With the mounting pressure of college coming closer everyday, students throw themselves into unbelievable schedules. Competitive students tackle AP courses with a staggering amount of extracurriculars, such as ASB, theater, football, track and field, debate club, and after-school tutoring. While some students feel that they must engage in every known extracurricular available, they miss the main point of joining these activities. Extracurriculars are meant to foster specific interests. Students should take part in activities they truly have a passion for. There's no point in joining the Science Olympiad team if one's goal is to simply spice up his high school resume. As college admissions become more cut-throat every year, teenagers blindly take up such activities because they feel they will impress colleges. But it's much more logical to choose a few activities that peak one's interests so that creativity an curiosity can develop. </p>
<p>Limiting the number of extracurriculars will help to restore the precious component of life that most students are missing out on: sleep. Students can barely concentrate in class when they're constantly sleeping at 3 AM or even pulling all-nighters. Some may say that teenagers should learn to manage their own lives because they learn responsibility and are nearly legal adults. But there is no harm in some outside help from school administrators. The restriction on activities serves as a wake-up call to teenagers. Additionally, students need sleep to reduce stress, which they constantly deal with from the competitive academic culture they're living in. Administrators should move on with their plans to encourage students to get a healthier lifestyle and mange time more wisely. </p>
<p>Students struggle to keep up with the near-impossible standards that tower over them everyday. They need help. After all, they're just young people trying to break out into the real world in the future. They need guidance on how to succeed academically and socially. By moving forward with the administrators' plans, hopefully schools will raise more bright, energetic students and cure the epidemic of student sleep-deprivation and stress.</p>