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<p>Prompt: In some cities, laws have been proposed that would restrict licensed drivers under 18 to driving alone or with an adult in the car. Parents and lawmakers who favor such laws point to the high incidence of ar accidents with 16 and 17 year old drivers, and claim that not allowing teenagers under 18 to ride together will help newer drivers to focus on driving safely. Teenagers and parents who are against the restriction argue that teengerrs riding together isn't necessarily the cause of the accidents and that more comprehensive driver training is a better way to reduce accidents. In your opinion, should cities pass laws that ban teenagers from riding in a car that is driven by a driver under 18?</p>

<p>Essay:</p>

<pre><code> Laws restricting drivers under 18 years of age to drive alone or with parents will not impact the amount of accidents among 16 and 17 yaer olds. Kids at the age of 16 and 17 are always with friends, so blindly blaming accidents on this fact is quite ignorant. The real reason for most car accidents that take place between 16 and 17 year olds is because it is then when drivers have the least experience.

Sixteen and Seventeen year olds are at their peak of being social. Most teenagers tend to preform better and feel more comfortable around friends. Forcing teens to drive alone will only have negative results. There will be less brain power and eyes in the car, which will result in more frequent accidents. Afer all, who said that alert passengers haven't actually saved their fellow peers from an accidents?

A very well known saying says "Practice makes perfect". Generally in any situation, the more practice and experience one has at something, the better one will preform. If accident rates are high in 16 and 17 year olds it is only natural. The only thing that can be done is to have more practice pushed on to young drivers. Regardless, drivers will still be the least skilled at young ages.
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<p>The biggest arguement that people have for enforcing this law is that all teen drivers fool around and pay little attention to the road wihle driving. Statements such as these give false stereotypes to young drivers. In all age groups distractions occur. Also, young people are much more alert than elderly people. If an accident was to take place, a 16 or 17 year old driver will most likely avoid it better than one at an age of seventy years or older. many young drivers are very catious due to the fact they know that they aren't experienced.</p>

<p>In Conclusion, laws restricting drivers under 18 years of age to driving alone of with an adult are of no help. The fact that teenagers are always with freinds leads many to fasely accuse friend passengers for the reason of accidents among begining drivers. Drivers at the age of 16 and 17 have a lack of experience. The only solution to this dilemma is to more strictly enforce teens to practice their driving skills.</p>

<p>Thx. please remember the act graders understand that ur essay is brainstormed in only 30 minutes. also any help to improve my essay will be greatly appreciated because it helps a lot more than just giving me a number. ill prolly say what grade i got on the real act if i see ppl are giving me ecentric numbers</p>

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<p>bump, any reccomendations to improve my future essays?</p>

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<li> I would say it is a very good essay, but probably needs more transitions. Each paragraph has more of an abrupt change and makes it not flow nearly as smoothly. A strong argument, but could also use more examples. You gave only a few examples, try more. Also, the idea about the senior citizens makes sense, but isn’t exactly the route I would reccommend. Good luck with your future essays.</li>
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<p>Can someone grade mine too? i care more about the second one, just so you know.</p>

<p>Essay 1</p>

<p>Prompt: In some states, legislators have debated whether teenagers should be required to maintain a “C” grade average in school before receiving a driver’s license. Some people think this would be a good policy because having passing grades shows that students are responsible enough o be good drivers. Other people think such a policy would not be appropriate because they see no relationship between grades in school and driving skills. In your opinion, should teenagers be required to maintain a “C” average in school before receiving a driver’s license?</p>

<p>Recently, legislators have been considering barring poor students from obtaining drivers licenses. Students with averages of D or below would be unable to keep a license until they improved their grades. I don’t need a license to understand that such an idea if flawed. Some unfortunate students need their licenses to support their family. Also, having good grades is not an accurate measure of one’s driving skills. Finally, the measure will encourage failing students to cheat on tests and quizzes for a better grade. Students should have the right to a drivers’ license regardless of their academic performance.</p>

<p>Some students with poor grades are also economically poor. They may live in an impoverished situation. Therefore, their parents will rely on their older child to support the family through a job or by running time-consuming errands around the town. If the student has no drivers’ license, they will be, furthermore, unable to go out and pick up the day’s bread and potatoes. “Then the child should study,” legislators will cry. However, these students often find it difficult to stay on top of their studies while holding down an 8 hour shift at the McDonald’s. As a result they are unable to study and get a good grade. There are students like this in any town. Taking away their drivers license is synonymous to taking away their only mode of transportation.</p>

<p>Passing grades are not a valid indicator of one’s character. The students with the 4.0 GPAs may not be as responsible as one things. For instance, they may have cheated in order to receive that 95 on the test. Students with B averages are also susceptible to cheating and plagiarism. Neither action immediately demonstrates responsibility. Although these students have other skills necessary for the road, like patience and diligence, they are still teenage drivers and all the negative connotations that go along with the label. Students with poor grades are just as capable of driving responsibly as students with higher grades.</p>

<p>I may not have my driver’s license, but I can understand that judging a student’s sense of responsibility is unjust. Students who support their families at the cost of their GPA demonstrate responsibility by holding down a job. Their job, which takes tens of hours of their week, severely decreases their time to work on homework. In addition, students with high grades demonstrate diligence instead of responsibility on the road. Legislators should stop considering such a course of action.</p>

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<p>Essay 2</p>

<p>Prompt: A number of health organizations are lobbying the Motion Picture Association of America (MPAA) to incorporate cigarette smoking into the criteria for a restricted, or R, rating for films. Since the R rating requires anyone under the age of 17 to be accompanied by a parent or guardian, supporters of this policy believe it would reduce the exposure youths may have to smoking as a glamorous habit and make these teens less likely to smoke as a result. Opponents of the policy believe it would curtail the creative freedom of the filmmakers. In your opinion, should movies be rated R if they contain cigarette smoking?</p>

<p>Cigarette smoking is a prominent part of American culture. Fortunately, its popularity has faded. People are aware of smoking’s unpleasant side-effects. Despite all the warnings and brochures, some youths smoke regardless. Teens who smoke are at risk for lung cancer and other terminal diseases. Given the horrific consequences of smoking, dissuading these teens from the cursed habit is a cause that must be pursued. Since the motion picture industry has a noticeable effect on trends, it would be wise to banish glamorous cigarette smoking to rated R movies. </p>

<p>If teens don’t see people smoking in movies they will be less likely to smoke themselves. Teenagers are easily influenced. For example, when fashion magazines declared neon pants to be trendy, thousands of girls immediately bought their own pair. Movies have the same effect ton capricious teenage minds. We are already subjected to tens of messages every day by the media, and smoking would be a poisonous one.</p>

<p>Additionally, because less people watch rated R movies, smoking’s popularity will diminish. It will be out of the way of the public eye. Moreover, over a long period of time, smoking will be less “present” in people’s minds. Some will argue that banishing smoking to rated R movies will have no effect. Thousands watch rated R movies daily, and many teenagers surreptitiously sneak in as well. However, there are thousands more people who do not watch rated R movies. Some movie theaters don’t show rated R movies. If glamorous smoking is put in rated R movies, then overall, it will spend less time basking in a positive light.</p>

<p>I completely support incorporating cigarette smoking into the criteria for a rated R movie. It is an innovative policy and there is no reason why the rate of smoking in teens will not further diminish as a result of its implementation. If ‘success’ is defined as 1 less person smoking, then I think this policy will be a success.</p>