Grade my eaasy please~

<p>We often hear that we can learn much about someone or something just by casual observation. We are not required to look beneath the surface or to question how something seems. In fact, we are urged to trust our impressions, often our first impressions, of how a person or a situation seems to be. Yet appearances can be misleading. What "seems" isn't always what is.</p>

<p>Assignment: Is the way something seems to be not always the same as it actually is?</p>

<p>The way something seems is not always the same as it actually is. As far as we know, the world is made up of complexity and diversity; nothing has only one facet, and the theory is also applicable to people. Our experience proves that our impression about people can be rather unreliable. As a result, we would better examine objects and people by studying their substantial qualities rather than misleading appearances.</p>

<p>In history, there are countless well-known figures who share unsurpassable fame, but fail to construct their frames to cater to their adherents imagination. Let us take Mozart into consideration. This transcendent musician is widely considered as a genius in music history, in which he inscribed his name with his extraodinary talents and prolificacy of compositions. People who give admiration to this outstanding musician built a sublime statue in his hometown. However, the statue, though reflects Mozart's passion with its vivacious facial expression, can hardly be recognized by thoes who are familiar with Mozart. In reality, Mozart is far from a handsome and robust young man, as the way the statue was produced, but actually his appearance can be described as "tough". With his unkempt hair and poor health condition, the great musician's appearance can never meet his talents. But people have learnt not to judge the genius by the impression he left us, but by his unsurmountable aptitude and precious qualities. So, people's intrinsic qualities do not always equal their appearances.</p>

<p>Moreover, the reliability of impression is also lessened by literary works. One illustrational work is Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde by Louis Stevenson. In the fiction , Dr. Jekyll is reverently regarded as a friendly and kind intelligentsia , but another character in him is both sinister and sadistic. Though it seems nothing is shared in common by the two totally different men, both of them are parts of Jekyll or Hyde. The story tells a tacit theory that every man's characteristics are complicated. To know people's true self-being from the appearances is misleading.</p>

<p>Conclusively, though we prefer to make a judgement by setting our impression as the criterion, reality contradicts our universal belief that the way something seems is always the same as it actually is.</p>

<p>Perfect Pride and Prejudice prompt.</p>

<p>I'd give your essay an 8-9.</p>

<p>The Mozart example is not very convincing, to me anyway...</p>

<p>There are also some minor errors in grammar and spelling, and you sometimes repeat words.</p>

<p>I also thing the Mozart example is ridiculous...
Anyway, thank you for your advice~</p>

<p>Go for more plot structure. The basic thing they want to see is how you present your ideas. I personally only go with the 3-body paragraph style with an intro and conclusion. Keep it sweet and concise to the point. Writing more is not always better and can ruin a perfectly good essay.</p>

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<li>It's an average essay.</li>
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