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<p>Could someone please grade and comment on my essay? Where could I improve on it? Thanks in advance!</p>

<p>As John Chaffee said in “The Thinker’s Way,” people can have virtually any opinion, but this does not imply that their opinion should be considered as valuable as informed opinions. People’s opinions could be illogical, uninformed, or foolish. However, examples from literature and history demonstrate the fact that opinions are valuable only when they are supported by thorough knowledge of the subject.</p>

<pre><code>In Harper Lee’s timeless classic To Kill a Mockingbird, an African American, Tom Robinson, is a defendant in a trial accusing him of raping a white girl, Mayella. There are many misinformed opinions around the town stemming from racism and unfounded prejudices, so it is vital for only the most unbiased views, such as those of Atticus, a respected lawyer around town, to be digested and trusted. The testimony of Bob Ewell also shows how thickheaded he is, as Atticus prods him with questions that expose his family’s turbulent life and uncovers key contradictions in his version of events that seriously undermine Bob Ewell’s credibility and therefore, Tom’s guilt. When Tom is held in jail pending his trial, a group of white men go to the jail at night planning to lynch him. However, this mob was misinformed and formed illogical conclusions. Had Atticus not been guarding Tom at the jail, there would have been disastrous results.

During World War II, Adolf Hitler built up support in Nazi Germany through the avid use of propaganda. By taking advantage of the German people’s anger at the Treaty of Versailles following World War I and the naivety, Hitler acted deceptively and was able to pass horrible lies as truths. The Germans were foolish and readily accepted any opinion, regardless of how illogical or misguided it was, making them puppets in Hitler’s scheme. Tragically, this led to the Holocaust and genocide, namely the extermination of six million Jews.

It is evident that although people are entitled to have their own opinions, only valuable, knowledgeable opinions should be taken seriously. The unfounded claims and prejudices in Harper Lee’s To Kill a Mockingbird and the progression of Nazi Germany during World War II attest to the importance of ignoring illogical, uninformed, and foolish opinions.
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<p>please help! thanks!</p>

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<p>It is amazingly good and detailed! Your essay was filled with good vocabulary words, and the two details were good.</p>

<p>If you had time left in the thirty minutes, maybe you could add another supporting detail? I always thought that three was a strong number, and both of your examples are fairly similar. Maybe you could offer another reason on the repercussions of illogical opinions, other than just your bottom line of how other people can be hurt. You could also talk about how not one opinion can always be right (“Country music is better than pop music”).</p>

<p>Also, maybe you could add some thoughtful statement to your conclusion? Maybe analyze why Bob Ewell and Hitler held their opinions, or some cycle of ignorance.</p>

<p>But I think you would have gotten a 12, truthfully. Really, these are just ideas if you had an extra five minutes on the clock.</p>

<p>If you are taking the test in June good luck!</p>

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<p>Thanks for the comments. You seem like a nice grader. I’ve never gotten higher than an 8 for my essays on this forum.</p>

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<p>Instead of simply naming off examples and saying why the relate to the prompt, try to elaborate more with your own logic and analysis. </p>

<p>This would probably get a 9-10</p>

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<p>8-9 cause of sentence construction</p>