Grade my essay please?

<p>So I decided to go for 3 examples for this one, I filled up all the space but I'm not sure if 3 is really better than 2 as I feel like the quality of each example goes down with 3 examples. Any thoughts on that?</p>

<p>Anyways here is the essay. Please mention strengths and weaknesses. Thank you!</p>

<p>Are widely held views often wrong, or are such views more likely to be correct?</p>

<p>The global acceptance of a certain view does not necessarily mean that that view is correct. On the contrary, widely held views are often wrong because the public is easily influenced by other members of society. Several examples, such as Galileo, the Othello or Rosa Park, prove this point.</p>

<p>During the 16th century, the church spread the idea that the earth was at the center of the universe and that everything revolved around it; a widely accepted view, at the time, that we now know, because of Galileo’s efforts, is erroneous and fake. Everyone accepted the notion that the earth was at the center of the universe because it gave them a sense of importance, which explains it was so difficult for people to accept that their view might have been flawed. Galileo tried to convince people that they were wrong but their mind was set in stone. Unless people can find proof or scientific evidence that something is true, they cannot just accept something as plausible just because everyone else thinks the same. Therefore, as this example has shown, because the common person is too easily influenced by the opinion of others when making decisions, a widely held view is often wrong.</p>

<p>As shown by the character Iago, in Othello, views held by many people can be the complete opposite of the truth. Throughout the play, Iago propagates the idea that he is honest by bluntly saying whatever he thinks. By doing that, he earns the nickname “honest Iago” which is obviously a deviation of the truth. Not until the very end of the play did everyone realize that their widely held view was in fact wrong. Iago’s devious and cunning manners might not have been seen by the public but there nevertheless. People, too often, accept what they hear first as universally true which is a terrible habit. Everyone believed that Iago was honest because that is all that was being said about him even though he was actually incredibly duplicitous. Hence, this example proves that the public too easily accepts widely held views without any investigation as to whether or not they are true. </p>

<p>Through the events that Rosa Park went through during the 20th century, one can see that commonly shared views, due to their absurd nature, are often very far from being true. At that time, racial discrimination in America, a view held by a majority of people stated that black people were basically inferior to white people. Blacks had to sit in different sections in buses, had to go to different bathrooms and even had to drink in different water fountains. Today everyone feels like this completely ridiculous view, thanks to courageous actions of Rosa Park is wrong and should be frowned upon. Racism, a common viewpoint, was a belief based on assumptions made by ignorant and stupid people who were able to convince a vast majority of people. Thus we can see that widely held views often arise from ridiculous origins and should therefore not be trusted.</p>

<p>To conclude, through Galileo, Iago and Rosa Park, we can see that widely held views are often wrong because people are too easily influenced by the public opinion.</p>

<p>I agree that you examples get worse as you go on. For Rosa Parks, you don’t seem to know a lot of specific evidence related to the prompt. It’s good you filled up the space, though. 7/12.</p>

<p>6/12 would not grade again</p>

<p>The global acceptance of a certain view does not necessarily mean that that view is correct.
(awkward wording)</p>

<p>On the contrary, widely held views are often wrong because the public is easily influenced by other members of society. Several examples, such as Galileo, the Othello or Rosa Park, prove this point.
(explain WHY, not just what)</p>

<p>“erroneous and fake”. (-1 for such awkward placement of SAT vocab.)</p>

<p>P.S. NEVER use the word “plethora” in any essay, it just sounds plain wrong</p>

<p>If you want to use awkward vocabulary, do so in the form of alliteration, such as “demagogue’s discursive diatribe”. ALWAYS bolden the first letter of each alliterated word, as the graders will often miss it if you don’t (because they read an essay in 20 seconds and don’t expect any alliteration, especially not with big words)</p>

<p>Everyone accepted the notion that the earth was at the center of the universe because it gave them a sense of importance, which explains it was so difficult for people to accept that their view might have been flawed. Galileo tried to convince people that they were wrong but their mind was set in stone. Unless people can find proof or scientific evidence that something is true, they cannot just accept something as plausible just because everyone else thinks the same. </p>

<p>This could be all said in one sentence, and it sounds weird</p>

<p>Therefore, as this example has shown, because the common person is too easily influenced by the opinion of others when making decisions, a widely held view is often wrong.</p>

<p>Don’t shove examples in the reader’s face so blatantly and uncoughishly</p>

<p>As shown by the character Iago, in Othello, views held by many people can be the complete opposite of the truth.
(same as above)</p>

<p>Throughout the play, Iago propagates (YES) the idea that he is honest by bluntly saying whatever he thinks. By doing that, he earns the nickname “honest Iago” which is obviously a deviation of the truth. Not until the very end of the play did everyone realize that their widely held view was in fact wrong. Iago’s devious and cunning manners might not have been seen by the public but there nevertheless. People, too often, accept what they hear first as universally true which is a terrible habit. Everyone believed that Iago was honest because that is all that was being said about him even though he was actually incredibly duplicitous (YES).</p>

<p>Hence, this example proves that the public too easily accepts widely held views without any investigation as to whether or not they are true. </p>

<p>NOOOOO!</p>

<p>Through the events that Rosa Park went through during the 20th century, one can see that commonly shared views, due to their absurd nature, are often very far from being true. At that time, racial discrimination in America, a view held by a majority of people stated that black people were basically inferior to white people. (NO NEED TO EXPLAIN THIS) Blacks had to sit in different sections in buses, had to go to different bathrooms and even had to drink in different water fountains. Today everyone feels like this completely ridiculous view, thanks to courageous actions of Rosa Park is wrong and should be frowned upon. Racism, a common viewpoint, was a belief based on assumptions made by ignorant and stupid people who were able to convince a vast majority of people.
Could be said more effectively with less (I mean fewer) words. Explain what the hell RP did</p>

<p>Thus we can see that widely held views often arise from ridiculous origins and should therefore not be trusted.</p>

<p>For the 100th time do not do this</p>

<p>To conclude, through Galileo, Iago and Rosa Park, we can see that widely held views are often wrong because people are too easily influenced by the public opinion.</p>

<p>Conc too short, for the 101th time do not do this</p>

<p>How to write a good SAT Essay :</p>

<p>think of examples for several generic SAT prompts beforehand, so you don’t have to think of examples during the exam and you can dedicate all ur tiem to writing</p>

<p>Make your intro P 4-5 sentences</p>

<p>Don’t base your essay off of examples! Base it off a concept! Like "a consensus that something’s right doesn’t mean that it is. Consensus makes most of the dissenting minority believe the majority, vicious cycle of “truth” believers (you might not be able to express all of this on a 25 minute paper)</p>

<p>Explain why your examples connect to your concept (like RP started CR movement, changed the status quo (consensus), then ppl don’t believe racism)</p>

<p>Conclusion needs to be at least 2 sentences</p>

<p>EXTRAS:</p>

<p>use alliteration (make it obvious by bolding the 1st letter)</p>

<p>use allusions (if you can)</p>

<p>“Today everyone feels like this completely ridiculous view, thanks to courageous actions of Rosa Park is wrong and should be frowned upon.” Wow… this is naive.</p>

<p>I agree with the posters above, except I know for a fact that you sat down and spent around 45 minutes typing this; therefore, grading it would be pointless.</p>

<p>Don’t try to hard to incorporate advanced vocabulary of you don’t know how to use it. On my SAT I recall using very few SAT words (and I only used 2 body paragraphs as well) and still pulled off a 10. So don’t lower the quality of your essay by trying too hard.</p>

<p>ugh the essay is so annoying… anyways thanks for the advice, I’ll try to work on the flaws of the essay.</p>