Grade my essay please

<p>There is always a "However".Any peace of knowledge has its benefits and pitfalls.In the field of science,we can find a compelling evidence that corroborates this thesis.</p>

<p>During the seventeenth century,Catholic church held most of the power.Its opinion was a law.Never before had a scientist disputed any of their beliefs.Yet,galileo,a seventeenth century scientist and astronomer,was the first to dispute one of the catholic church's beliefs.After he devised the telescope in 1609,he was the first to question the church's statement that the earth was the center of the solar system.He,instead,argued that the sun was the orbit that lied at the center of the solar system and that earth was just a planet in its orbit.Although this knowledge was both enlightening and revolutionary,it was also a great burden.</p>

<p>Galileo's theory was met with belief and outrage.The catholic church refused to budge to Galileo's idea as it thought that Galileo's theory belied the statements in the bible.Thus,in 1616,the church sent him formal warning and considered his theory a denial of christian doctrine.At first,Galileo complied and refrained from published anything about his theory.Yet,after he reconsidered the issue,he published his work to advance our understanding of astronomy.Unfortunately,he was accused of heresy and spent the last 17 years of his life under house arrest.Though his knowledge was a great burden to him,today,Galileo's discovery is considered to be one of the most important discoveries of his time.</p>

<p>Although his knowledge was a great burden to Galileo,it led to the of one of the most revolutionary theories until now.If Galileo hadn't endured the burdens of knowledge,he wouldn't have been able to advance our current understanding of astronomy.</p>

<p>“There is always a “However”.Any peace of knowledge has its benefits and pitfalls.In the field of science,we can find a compelling evidence that corroborates this thesis.”</p>

<p>Work on your grammar and spelling… you also may want to flesh out this intro a little more. Make sure to use the right words, for example “peace” should be “piece”. </p>

<p>You seem to have a good example, but in most cases if you are looking to score a 8+ you should have more than just one example. Perhaps you should talk about a literary work or one of your own personal experiences? </p>

<p>What score are you aiming for?</p>

<p>i got a 9 3 times and i am aiming for 10 or 11</p>

<p>this intro is the same length as a 12 essay from official sat :S</p>