<p>Prompt:
Is it always better to be original than to imitate or use the ideas of other?</p>
<p>Essay: </p>
<pre><code> Is originality important? being original is difficult yet crucial. Examples of history and present life are clear evidence that originality always prevails.
Hannibal is a great example that originality is always the best solution as it's unexpected. Hannibal's courageous decision to invade Rome isn't the only reason he is considered one of the greatest men in war history, his plan to bring along elephants is dazzling and he he thought of a way to move elephants and an enormous number of men is still an ordeal to war strategy experts. He is one of the smartest war leaders because he did what nobody expected and was original.
Movies remind us constantly that originality is priceless. Classic movies like Batman or Superman are unique, remakes of movies are not significant and they fail ninety percent of the time.
Being original in our daily lives is very important. Last month I was asked to write the script for the school play. It was a remake of Taming The Shrew and the director, who was also a student, told me to stick to the Shakespearean way of seeing the characters, he wanted me to simply download the script from the internet.But I wanted to rewrite the whole thing in a more modern way so students would relate to it. I was given my space and I did what I wanted to do with the characters, everything was changed and the characters seemed more real and present than the pasted lines he wanted me to just hand in. The play was ready and everyone was impressed by it, which made me realize that being original is better than remaking what has already been done.
If every scientist only redid what his fellow scientists did there would be no progress in technology. We all think in a different way and we have different perspectives. This is the reason why originality is, indeed, valuable.
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<p>Um… you need to work on your essay writing. What I found most helpful weren’t the big companies SAT Essay writing or the SAT Study guide (Like Barron’s, or Collegeboard) but the small pocketbooks written by authors who give you a good guideline and template to begin writing a solid essay. Also the link on “how to get a 12 on essay in 10 days” or something like that is also very good. </p>
<p>Ur essay would be given a very low score (I don’t know how low but I’m guessing somewhere between 2-5). Ur intro needs work. Your essay is also short, which indirectly hurts your grade. Also, your example on the movies is extremely weak since you don’t go in depth. It’s only like 2 sentences? Solid essay paragraphs should be 4-7 sentences. You don’t have a concluding paragraph which also tremendously hurts your score since you don’t wrap up your essay in a solid punch. </p>
<p>Basically, the entire essay doesn’t go in-depth. Your example on your play is the closest one to going deep into your example but even then it’s only just touching the surface. I suggest on CC you go click on “search this forum” and type in “SAT Essays” and read all the examples and see what people say. And also, go on google and type in how to get a 12 on the SAT Essay is also good.</p>
<p>While this score seems harsh, your essay reflects little thought on the topic or mastery over the English language. The SAT readers must skim your essay for approximately one minute and then render their decision; thus, you must dazzle them with apt examples and excellent language usage.</p>
<p>1) You must expand your essay to exhibit more thought. Strive for 3-4 sentences that follow the template of introductory sentence/attention grabber; one or two development sentences; and your thesis. The thesis written in this essay is appropriate.</p>
<p>2) While Hannibal could serve as an exemplary example, your insufficient development sours the paragraph. You must PROVE YOUR THESIS, so always refer back to phrasing from your thesis. </p>
<p>3) The movie paragraph, or should I say two sentences, are tacked on and irrelevant to your essay. If want to expand on this, you must incorporate it into your thesis.</p>
<p>4) The same goes for the science example.</p>
<p>5) I think your personal example is fine, but better development would enhance your essay. Furthermore, the paragraph seems choppy so write coherently and succinctly.</p>
<p>6) The conclusion is inadequate. Again, you must tie your essay together through the conclusion so refer back to your thesis and relate it to your examples.</p>