<p>So this in on a scale of 1-6. please grade it? thanks :)</p>
<p>Is deception ever justified? (prompt)</p>
<p>->Across the world we question ourselves, quetions of what's right and what's wrong. Honesty is the best policy they say, but it really? On a grand scale on a situation, there are some situations to pick honesty, there are some to scenarios to choose decption.
-> You can't make it to your best friend's suite 16 because it just so happens your boyfrined's bithday party is that day. She's been your best friend f ryears, wouldn't she get infuriated when she realized you picked your boyfriend over her? What is not best but to lie and whisk all that drama? People do lie to keep their loved ones from being hurt by the process.
->People do honestly question themselves. I once read a story about a man who challenges himself to tell the truth all the time. He said his boss's singing was horrid even after his boss sang in dedication for three years, and he told other truths that don't help peple whatsoever. He lost all his friends during the process.
-> There are some truths left unsaid, there are other truths left said. It all depends on the situation. Tell the truth if it benefits the person, tell a lie if the truth would cause nothing but misery.</p>
<p>hey please help me im a mothet of 3 & im 25 I wanted to be an rn nut not any more I want to go.into . forensic science or forensic criminology does this make money how much schooling do I need to be successfull and what classes should I focus I want to start at an community college then university please reply I really need the help & advise thank yu</p>
<p>Your Essay is incredibly short, you used wrong words and spellings, you had little support, your examples were weak, and most of your sentences are akward.</p>
<p>I don’t mean to come off as blunt or offensive, but this is not a quality writing. I can give you some constructive criticism. Can you write one more essay, so I can see exactly what you are missing? Also, how long did the first essay take you?</p>
<p>uum i will… i’m going to practice right now… thanks and i don’t care if it’s offensive, be as offensive as you want, haha my feelings don’t matter, i just want a good score for my SAT… and it took me 25 minutes… the usual time to write SAT essays.</p>
<p>and i’m going to do it after i study a few. it will be up in a bit</p>
<p>i realized i made hello typos that’s why o_0 some parts of my essay typed isn’t what it exactly says on my written one</p>
<p>Probably elaborate on your examples abit apart from writing a lengthier one .i scored a 11 on the essay merely by explaining my fictional examples and using up every inch of space.also, make up any relevant examples using your own fictional dates,events and people.good luck!</p>
<p>Please grade my essay.
Topic- Do you agree that persistence is major factor in success and that talent,genius and education play at best as secondary role?</p>
<p>->Stay hungry stay foolish. steve jobs
I agree that persistence is major factor in success.The co-founder of apple Steve jobs although being a college dropout he stood up a & billion dollar company with his friend.It is not important to be a genius but the best part is not to give up.The determination to do something is the key to unlock the treasure.Many people from history who had succeeded in achieving their goals due to their assiduous behavior.
An intelligent person is also useless until he does hard work.Moreover we can say that persistence or diligence is only intelligence.The owner of Microsoft bill gates stood up his company at this platform because of focus and determination.
A valid example would be of leonardo da Vinci.The unusual genius,no one can deny that he was not talented he was perhaps greatest genius in history of mankind.But he spent his life thinking of countless inventions.He knew exactly how to build them but he never built them.He always shifted his thinking towards other things before completing one project.As a result he never really invented anything.
We can also take the case of most prolific inventor Thomas Alva Edison whose continuos hard work made him invent bulb.He attended school for few months and mostly was taught by his mother.It would be difficult to imagine a boy who went to school for countable number of days proved to be extraordinary brilliant.
One more illustration of Louis braille who got blind at his early age working with an awl.However due to his determination he created language for blind people at the age of 15.This braille was better and improved one than earlier languages.He developed this language with that instrument only by which he got blind.
This reflects his impeccable effort in changing his disability with ability to read and write.
Therefore nothing is impossible to achieve in life but under the condition that a continuos<br>
labour and optimism is compulsory.</p>
<p>1) “The co-founder of apple Steve jobs although being a college dropout he stood up a & billion dollar company with his friend.”</p>
<p>A more appropriate sentence structure: “Although he was a college drop-out, Steve Jobs managed to establish a multi-billion dollar company.”</p>
<p>2) “It is not important to be a genius but the best part is not to give up.The determination to do something is the key to unlock the treasure.”</p>
<p>A more appropriate sentence structure: “Being a genius isn’t important. Determination, on the other hand, is crucial.”</p>
<p>3) ‘From history’ is not idiomatic. I believe ‘in history’ is the correct idiomatic phrase.</p>
<p>4) “The unusual genius,no one can deny that he was not talented he was perhaps greatest genius in history of mankind”</p>
<p>Again, this sentence is rather awkwardly phrased. I suggest using “Nobody can deny that Leonardo DaVinci was talented; he was perhaps the greatest genius in the history of mankind. However, despite his intellect, he was unable to bring his works to completion because…” (I am rather doubtful, though, about whether the use of subordination is appropriate in my first sentence.)</p>
<p>As I was reading through your essay, I found several other awkward sentence structures and grammatical errors. Please don’t misinterpret this as rude, but you should work on improving your sentence structure.</p>
<p>(prompt)
Time has a doomsday book, on whose pages he is continually recording illustrious names. But as often as a new name is written there, an old one disappears. Only a few stand in illuminated characters never to be effaced.</p>
<p>Assignment:
Are there some heroes who will be remembered forever? Or are all heroes doomed to be forgotten one day? Plan your response, and then write an essay to explain your views on this issue. Be sure to support your position with specific points and examples. (You may use personal examples or examples from your reading, observations, or, knowledge of subjects such as history, literature, science.) </p>
<p>(essay)
-> The hero saves the day once again. Heros all over the world include you and me. Sometimes it’d sad that are good deeds don’t come in notice. Yet there are some heros that do get noticed, and depending on how much they change the world, they left a permanent imprint in the book of heros book.
-> There are all types of heros really. We tend to portray those “heros” in fictional movies and TV’s as well. Spiderman, the typcial fictional hero that saves people’s lives. Spiderman will always be remembered as the man in a red costume, and the man with a unique demanor. He has been around, recognized and remembered for years. Therefore, he is the profound hero that was never forgotten.
-> There are also real heros that changed are lives today, and they are all over our history book. Martin Luthur King risked his life to ensure equal righs for his people. He’s done such risky yet just deeds to fight. He is always repeated in our textbooks, memorials, and teachers. There’s a holiday for him too! That just goes to prove he is one hero that left his permanent remnant forever.
-> Another hero that created a paradigm shift was a strong woman that led the woman’s suffrage. She also took some risks, like leavning the Conservatives, and forming a radical group. She wanted to have as much attention as possible to gain her rights. She protested in front of Congress, and her group even experianced jail. She risked her job, stature, and life to gain equal rights for women.
-> There are some heros that will be forever mentioned. Have you noticed all the heros that I mentioned here risked their lives for the benefit of other people? Heros risking their lives are such top-notch , therefore hat is the reason why their names are forever imprinted in the Book of Heros. </p>
<p>Okay i know… i have tense issues… i still needa work on that… i felt like i did worse then my 1st one o___0 but i’m getting to it. </p>
<p>Well, this one definitely improved from the previous one. But not by much. I would give this one most likely a 4-6ish out of 12. The main problem with your writings is not the grammatical mistakes. Rather, it is the absence of critical thinking.</p>
<p>Your writing reads like an middle school student’s trying to recount a story. It’s like, “He did this, and he did that. So he was this.” Your writing lacks variety. The briefness of the essay does not help this at all. You can try making a universal template for your essays. It will definitely help you write more in the given time.</p>
heros -> heroes
Sometimes it’d sad that -> Sometimes it is said that
in the book of heros book -> in the book of heroes
Spiderman -> Spider-Man
typcial -> typical
demanor -> demeanor
Martin Luthur King -> Martin Luther King
righs -> rights
He is always repeated in our textbooks, memorials, and teachers -> He is frequently cited in our textbooks and memorials, and even by teachers.
experianced -> experienced
There are some heros that… -> There are some heroes who…
leavning -> leaving
“Heros risking their lives are such top-notch , therefore hat is the reason why their names are forever imprinted in the Book of Heros” - rephrase</p>
<p>You need to seriously work on your written English. And avoid using second person.</p>
<p>Please grade my essay too… any advice greatly appreciated</p>
<p>prompt: Is it best to forget about past mistakes as soon as possible?</p>
<p>Many great leaders have made mistakes throughout history, such as Albert Einstein and Franklin Roosevelt. It is best to forget about past mistakes as soon as possible, in order to achieve greatness.</p>
<p>Albert Einstein made many mistakes as a child but that didn’t stop him from working. When he was in school, he struggled greatly, earning poor grades and seemingly have no intellectual future. However, as he grew up, he forgot all his past mistakes and worked hard to develop the theory of relativity. His work has provided the basis for modern physics and earned him a Nobel Prize in 1921. By forgetting his past mistakes, he was able to become one of the most respected scientists in the history of mankind.</p>
<p>Franklin Roosevelt made many mistakes as the President of the United States. During his presidency, he was faced with possibly the worst economic crisis in the history of America. When he came into office, he proposed a “New Deal” plan that would get the United States out of the Great Depression. However, two reforms he incoorperated into this plan, the Agricultural Adjustment Act and the National Recovery Administration, were ineffective to the situation and ended up being considered having too much power, eventually being declared unconstitutional. That did not stop President Roosevelt from persisting on. He continued to pass reforms, such as the Civil Works Administration and the Public Works Administration, that brought millions of jobs to the unemployed and successfully brought the United States out of the Great Depression. Roosevelt’s New Deal ended up being one of the most important reform programs in America’s history.</p>
<p>It is important to keep working even if one makes a mistake, no matter how large. Both Albert Einstein and President Roosevelt proved this by working hard, even after making mistakes. If they had not moved on from their mistakes, they would not have gone to achieve greatness.</p>
<p>^^ I would say an 8/9. Your thesis is nice and short-that’s good. Just try to get more into the breadth of the topic. Don’t be afraid to be over-analytical. The only problem I see is the length. Try to introduce another example, make it longer, and make it more relatable.</p>
and i don’t care if it’s offensive, be as offensive as you want, haha my feelings don’t matter, i just want a good score for my SAT… and it took me 25 minutes… the usual time to write SAT essays.</p>
congrats</p>