Grade SAT Essay: Deception

<p>Prompt: Is deception ever justified?</p>

<p>This is my first essay, some input would be helpful, thanks. Please tell me what you think I would get out of 6. My first example is made up by the way.</p>

<pre><code>Deception is often crucial in order to prosper. Several examples from history and literature show that deception is necessary.
During the Zhou dynasty in ancient China, King Wu found himself in a precarious situation. He was in the midst of the Warring States Period. The war was a battle of attrition. Thus, he sent a small group of suicide soldiers containing fake battle plans, and the leader of the Ping clan fell for it. Wu and his soldiers then successfully flanked the enemy and won the battle, using deception.
In ‘Animal Farm,’ a novel by George Orwell, Napoleon the pig asserts his dominance over the other farm animals via deception. Over time, Napoleon shapes the the tenets of ‘Animalism’ in his favor. Some animals notice that Napoleon is violating the tenets, but Napoleon deceives them by having one of his loyal pigs change the tenets during the night. Hence, Napoleon successfully created class system in his favor using deception.
Finally, deception played a vital role in the outcome of the Trojan War. Troy, the city of the Trojans, was enclosed by a virtually impenetrable wall. The Greeks, seemingly “accepting defeat”, gave the Trojans a peace offering: a giant horse. Unbeknownst to the Trojans, the Greek warriors had hid inside the horse. During the night, the Greeks exited the horse and wreaked havoc upon Troy. Without the use of deception, the Greeks might not have won the war.
To reiterate, deception is indeed a key role in achieving prosperity. When deception is used, the upper hand can be attained.
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