Help me cut down my Common App essay, please?

College Essays
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<p>I'm at 583 words and I'm a bit stuck; I'd love some help/suggestions on what to get rid of. (:
Also, I'm having trouble with the wording of my first sentence.</p>

<p>Post/PM if you're willing to read it!</p>

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<p>Aaaaanyone?</p>