HELP! My essay.

<p>Hi people,</p>

<p>I'm quite new to this forum. But I was wondering if anyone could help me with my essay. Give me pointers on how good is my essay, rooms for improvement and how to make it better. </p>

<p>Thank you.</p>

<p>p/s please private message me if you're interested. thanks.</p>

<p>You can PM me with the essay. I would be happy to review and comment.</p>

<p>Include:
your email address
the prompt for the essay
the school(s) where you will send it</p>

<p>Thank you very much.</p>