HELP! Supplemental essay #2

<p>Hi everyone,
I am working on the second supplemental essay for the Michigan application. I plan to major in biochemistry and follow the pre-pharmacy curriculum. Ive done research on their chem department and opportunities it offers, but my essay is falling short in terms of length. Could someone please read what I have so far and make some suggestions as to what I might need to add? Any tips on where to find more information that I could use would be helpful too; all I've found so far are websites owned by Umich. I'm looking for more personal comments at this point. </p>

<p>Thanks in advance for any replies</p>