Help with applytexas essay!

<p>Hi, so I'm a pretty terrible writer, and would like some criticism of my essay. Some issues I think it has include lack of sophistication and a weak ending. I'm also not sure if what I wrote about relates close enough to the prompt.</p>

<p>PROMPT: Considering your lifetime goals, discuss how your current and future academic and extra-curricular activities might help you achieve your goals.</p>

<p>Post here if you're willing to read, and thanks in advance!</p>