<p>I'm running for Spanish NHS co-president at my school, and could use some help with the speech. I'm a great worker, but my speech-writing skills aren't the best. I know that a lot of you hold positions like this - could you help me out with writing my speech?</p>
<p>Any tips on how to write a good one are appreciated. Thanks!</p>
<p>For one, do not brag. If you are going to list accomplishments, relate them to why you deserve to be co-president. (e.g. If you say “I’m an AP student” say why it would help as co-president, so you could say "It shows that I’m smart, and a hard worker) Also, don’t be dull and monotone. People will be bored within seconds. Try to be humorous. If your not humorous, then speak in a conversational manner so people will listen. Try to connect to your audience. The worst thing you can do is be boring. Even if your speech is great on paper, people won’t know that. So you have to present it in a way they will listen. Trust me, i have given many speeches before. After a point, you learn the little things that really help out.</p>
<p>If I were you, I’d talk about why you want to president of the Spanish NHS and what direction you want to take the Spanish NHS. Do you want to have fundraising events? Do you want to try to get more members for the Spanish NHS? Incorporate your reasons for wanting to be co-president, your goals, and maybe some other leadership experience you have into the speech. I wouldn’t tell people that you’re an AP student or list your academic honors. I think leadership experience is more relevant. Good luck!</p>
<p>Telling people things like your academic accomplishments is important, actually. With the right reasons as to why you are saying them, it provides insight as to why they are relevant to why you should be co-president. There is a fine line between bragging, and explaining, and if you can find that line your good.</p>
<p>Well it’s an over the e-mail speech… not quite sure why… but if that changes anything, or anybody has any additional tips, please let me know! I’ll post my “speech” on here at some point before I e-mail it in, and if a few people could critique that would be great.</p>
<p>Here’s my speech. Please critique it or let me know anything I can do to make it better. Thank you! </p>
<pre><code> I, _________________, am running to be one of your co-presidents of the Spanish Honor Society.
I deserve to be elected because I have been a dedicated member of this club all year. Whenever a chance arises, I seize it and do everything I can to help. For the Cafe night, for example, I originally volunteered to bring in chicken and rice. They needed more plantains, so I fried some up. Then people were needed to serve the food, so I volunteered my time. Of course this is not the only time I volunteered, it’s just a The entire year, I have done everything in my power to help out this club.
Not only that, but I have previous leadership experience and have successfully balanced schoolwork, sports, and extra-curricular activities since my freshman year. I have worked as an editor on the school newspaper since 10th grade, and it has taught me a plethora of valuable intangibles -- how to meet strict deadlines, work with and help people, and make executive decisions, just to name a few. In addition, the Key Club members have recognized my leadership ability by electing me onto their board as the editor for the upcoming year.
This year, Spanish Honor Society has been a success. The two main fundraisers - Zumba Night and Cafe Night - seemed to be much more successful than I could have imagined. These are two events that definitely need to be continued for next year, making them better with our experience. Of course, it wouldn't hurt to add more fundraisers. My main idea is to have a couple restaurant nights throughout the year, as some clubs have done before. People love Spanish and Mexican food, and there are great restaurants near here that I’m sure would love our business. In addition, we could sell food after school every few weeks or even during football games. All of this money would go towards either sponsoring a child, helping to stop disease, or donating to a school in a Spanish speaking country. If possible, enough money would be raised to support a volunteering trip to somewhere like the Dominican Republic, but anything can make a difference.
I hope that by now you have recognized that my past experience with this club, past leadership experience, and will to build onto this society’s success make me a prime candidate to be one of your co-presidents. I look forward to next year. I promise I will lead this society to even bigger steps. Thank you.
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<p>Anybody?</p>
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<p>IMO too long, cut down from your 3rd paragraph. Otherwise, the content looks great! good luck :)</p>
<p>The first paragraph was just plain awful. Nobody deserves anything, and bringing “chicken and rice” is hardly a valid substantiation.</p>
<p>More polished language, and emphasize on how your plans are going to benefit the society. +use words like “together"and “you”,for example"If possible, enough money would be raised to support a volunteering trip to somewhere like the Dominican Republic, but anything can make a difference.“can be changed to”…would be raised so YOU can go on a volunteering trip …”
Small differences in language but big difference in emotions of the voters–says my debate/public speaking caoch</p>