Hi, can someone proofread this admission essay for me?

<p>Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why is this person important to you:</p>

<p>Most people have someone in their lives who has made an impact on them. If asked who it is, it would depend on the different stage of my life. When I was three, the person who made an impact on my life was my grandmother since she was the one that would take care of me and opened a new world to me. Now that I’m older, however, and can care for myself, I can identify the person who has made a strong, supportive impact on my life is my mother.</p>

<p>When I was just a young boy, my parents have to go for many business trips; therefore, the best choice for me was to stay with my grandmother. It was either she comes to the city to take care of me, or I go back to the village to stay with her. Back then, I have always preferred to go back to the village where it was so much more fun. Why was my grandma so important to me during that period of time you may ask? As far as I can remember, I was an extremely active young boy. I love asking questions and running around to see and do things that I have never done before. As long as I was with my grandma, she was willing to answer any questions that I had no matter how silly they sounded. To me those answers were eyes opener. In addition, since my grandma was always willing to help me out, it widen my knowledge of the world which seems to be little now, but back then it was amazing. This eventually guided me to who I am today, still eager to ask questions, still eager to find out new things. I am glad that when I was young, my grandma did not shun away from answering those questions that I had, otherwise I would not have become who I am today. And that to me, made a significant impact on my life.</p>

<p>Now that I am older, able to take care of myself wherever I am, the person who has made the strong impact on my life is no one else but my mother. No matter when it was in my life, my mother had always made a positive impact on my life. Even when I was young and she has to travel around a lot due to her work, I still received the same amount of love and care that other kids around me had as well. Whenever she goes oversea for her business trips, she never forgets to bring me something back. I still remembered when she went over to Thailand and bought me a pair of soccer cleats; it was really meaningful as I loved soccer since I was a kid. I could play with it alone or with other kids in the afternoon for hours and I was really upset when it was spoiled. When I was older, I was presented with an opportunity to go pursue education oversea as I was granted a scholarship to study in Singapore. I had to make a decision whether I want to accept or reject the scholarship. So the first person that I approached for opinion was my mom because she is the one that has always been there and takes care of me. If I chose to go, I have to learn how to take care of myself and at that time I was not sure whether I am up to the challenge. However, my mom encouraged me to do it since it will be extremely beneficial for me. I knew that when I leave for Singapore, my mom will miss me terribly, as I can see it in her eyes the day I was at the airport. However, I am glad that my mom encouraged me to go because during the four years stay in Singapore, I have learned how to be independent, as I have to take care of myself when I am sick, learn how to do my own laundry, learn how to cook Vietnamese food since the food there did not suite my taste… I also learned how to be a better person and how to live with people that may not share the same culture or heritage as me because I lived in the hostel where students from many countries live together. It was indeed a wonderful yet fulfilling experience for me because I had learned many things that I would not have if I chose to reject the scholarship. So to me, those words of encouragement that I received from my mom during my decision making period have impacted me greatly and shaped me to who I am today. </p>

<p>So in conclusion, in my life, there have been a lot of people around me that have impacted me in one way or another. However, the person that has the most impact on me varied during different stages of my life. Maybe, as I go on in life, the many people that I will meet in the future will definitely have their own part to play in my life, and there is a chance that someone among them will have a big impact on me. </p>

<p>Thank you.</p>

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<p>where are u applying?? your grammar seems to be very poor.</p>

<p>^^^ What they said.</p>