<p>I've sent off just about all my common apps and am planning an auxiliary essay for some of the schools that I am applying to.
This is the essay that I'm doing...
Although I have high test scores (ACT 35 and 5 SAT IIs 750+) I really don't consider myself to be as smart as many kids I know. It all comes down to work ethic. So here is my idea...
My relative Harlow Curtice (GM CEO during the 50's named TIME man of the year for increasing GM's profits 10x during his leadership, controlled the first company to reach 1 billion in sales, and regarded by many as the true reason that USA catapulated from the Great Depression) Although I'm sure you have never even heard his name. MOST IMPORTANTLY, he credited his success to his reputation as the hardest working man in America.</p>
<p>My grandpa always told me since I was young that I had a little harlow in me; I want to use this idea, tell of my business with 125-150k in sales, my success in athletics, and my success academically and accredit to my work ethic rather than reliance on natural ability as well as my desire to bring the automotive industry back to the D (yes, the automotive industry is now basically in China.)</p>
<p>I am afraid this sounds too arrogant, which is far from my intention. How should I go about this?</p>
<p>From what I just read you do not sound arrogant at all, anything but actually. </p>
<p>This may not be the best advice, and probably not what you're looking for, but be as genuine as possibly. Start from the beggining (when you were young) and go on untill the end. Focus more on showing instead of telling. Basically less facts and figures...show a more personal side, show more heart (which you know how to do already, I can tell!). </p>
<p>I think you already know how to write this! Your essay will give justice to not only Harlow, but to every person that has strived and worked for something (This includes yourself, the main focus of the essay!)Well, hope I helped in anyway possible! Good luck</p>
<p>Great idea, I was thinking that I was going to start out with harlow, but now I'll start out on my grandpa's lap kinda like a narrative, when he told me he was glad at least one grandchild had some harlow in him</p>
<p>"I am like my relative, the great executive" = telling, arrogant.</p>
<p>"I try to run my business the way that Harlow Curtice ran GM (not necessarily mentioning the relationship). Here is a typical day for my business ..., or here is how my business started, or here is how I care for my customers... -- or whatever, show something central to your business = showing, not arrogant.</p>