<p>I was told my essays were too arrogant and I should display humility. Yet, I found a bunch of essays online that I think are pretty arrogant and people are saying they're good. Perhaps it's because the essays online are a bit old and opinions have changed. Let me know what you think of this essay, I want to write something similar:</p>
<p>Youre too young. Why dont you just enjoy being your age? Rebellious and ambitious, I started my own business just to show everyone how wrong they were. At age thirteen, I sold hand-painted T-shirts from the backyard at my parents house. A year later, I pestered my father for enough money to start a small juice bar with two friends. Smiling triumphantly, I paid him back just five months later, but the the bar closed within a year. Looking back, Newtons law taught me to know better. What goes up must eventually come down. The crux is how to maintain a sustained upward motion.</p>
<p>With my strong entrepreneurial spirit, I have never been quite like the rest of my friends. I am always the dreamer, the inventor and the doer. I wake up in the middle of the night with earth-shattering ideas for intriguing new business concepts. With each new venture, I realize that entrepreneurs are not greedy capitalists, but agents of change.</p>
<p>We see opportunities that others do not and we create something from nothing. Several years ago, I decided to learn as much as I could about business and meet every entrepreneur in my community. Whenever possible, I attend foreign investment fairs and charitable fundraisers, and sit next to a corporate vice-president, magazine editor or bank president. We usually have great conversations. Every successful person gave me the same advice: devour as much information as possible about my proposed ventures.</p>
<p>At age fourteen, I made my first international relocation, moving from Malaysia to Brazil. Studying in a multicultural environment has dramatically broadened my personal perspective, my business contacts and my understanding of the world economy. In four years, I have established friendships with people from a dozen countries and formed a "San Paolo office" in my bedroom at the dorm. My management team includes a financial analyst from India, a high-tech consultant from Japan, and me, the visionary. Combining our diverse strengths, we design and sell inspirational CDs on the internet. We form a special blend that is versatile, open-minded and dynamic: traditional Confucian team spirit with Gandhian perseverance and Japanese diligence.</p>
<p>The unique combination of business and international studies at Harvard is an excellent fit for my talents and skills. The cross-cultural program will enable me to become a multidisciplinary problem solver and to launch my garage company on a global scale. In Harvards superior learning environment, I will further develop my intellectual capabilities and entrepreneurial drive, adding lustre to the distinguished program. I am prepared to meet the challenges of Harvard and open the doors of entrepreneurial possibility.</p>