<p>Hello,
I tried to write a really good essay because I have really weak ECs.</p>
<p>Here's a summary:
I became a Marxist after reading a book about it. I described how I liked this idea, and said it made me love learning itself. However, after learning more, I became able to see hopelessness in mankind, and became antisocial and nihilistic. However, I suddenly realized that I was myopic and overcame nihilism. And conclusion.</p>
<p>When I first thought of this topic, I thought it would be really great, but now I can't help thinking that it is only generic essay. Moreover, the topic seems pedantic and the entire essay is interspersed with many lies.</p>
<p>About antisocial part, I briefly mentioned that I disgusted hopelessness and evils of mankind. I think it is mild enough for college essay....</p>
<p>I really tried to honest, but I could not convey what I feel and think in 650 words essay without some distortion. Also, I think what people consider to be true about themselves is actually what they want to be portrayed. How can anyone who is neither poet nor philosopher know and describe himself accurately? And how can anyone know about anything just by reading 650 words essay? I tried my best, but I had to add some lies to portray myself more accurately. While I writing, I thought that the only way that I can convey my feeling is wring poems and that there was no way to convey my thoughts.</p>
<p>Actions speak louder than words. Do you actually do anything that makes you a Marxist? Is there any action in all of this or is it just a big muddle in your head? Adding lies to tell your truth is really bizarre.</p>
<p>In general, ANYTHING can become a good essay, it’s just how it’s worded. From the information you’ve given, it’s not enough to determine if it’s awesome or not, but generally you should avoid pessimism in your essay even if you claim to have overcame it (i mean, if you write it, it means you’re still looking back on it right? the memory has not left you completely?) Plus, “disgust,” “hopelessness,” and “evil” are REALLY strong and risky words to use in your essay.
Also, your essay depends on the school you’re applying to since every school has a different personality.
Now, for the final, most important part: if you’re not liking what you’re writing, don’t write about it! Right something that you can genuinely feel and can engagingly talk about for hours. If your essay is full of lies, scrap it, it’s not worth your time, and it’s not really “you.” Find who you really are, your CURRENT self, and just write about something that you genuinely have feelings about. It’s obvious when you’re just squeezing out ideas in order to convey half-hearted emotions that aren’t truly unique or genuine. If there is no way to wring out thoughts on a topic, don’t use it. If you have to use poems or extended metaphors to express emotion, don’t use it. Seriously, if you are truly emotional about something, it shouldn’t be hard explaining it, and it should be the right thing to put in your essay.</p>