<p>Do an intro, MAKE UP 3 examples, do a conclusion.</p>
<p>Example: Topic= Is freedom always the best for everyone.</p>
<p>Intro- use up space repeating the question, say no</p>
<p>ex 1- My sister at Brown was given too much freedom and she felt stressed out because she didn't know what classes to take because of the open curriculum</p>
<p>ex 2-In the book Jacky Brown, a girl Jacky Brown likes being a servant because she feels being in the real world and having to make her own choices is too much pressure</p>
<p>ex 3- My brother was forced to take science class, which he wouldn't have done on his own (he wanted to do football instead), but he ended up loving it and discovering a cure for a deadly disease that saved many lives.</p>
<p>Well, that seems like a pretty good essay. I think I’ll give you a 10.</p>
<p>Oh, wait a minute! Your first example was from personal experience, and those are frowned upon.</p>
<p>You get a 9.</p>
<p>Oh, shizzle! So is your third! </p>
<p>You get an 8.</p>
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<p>. . . For real? I mean, you can embellish your examples, but let’s be serious here.</p>
<p>You get a 7.</p>
<p>Although, it’s no secret that the introduction is going to be the most scrutinized paragraph, and I don’t know if your “repeating the question” idea is such a good one. </p>
<p>You get a 4.</p>
<p>Oh, and your conclusion is bad, too. You need to connect it to a larger idea.</p>
<p>3.</p>
<p>I was going to leave example 2 alone, but nowhere there does it say that her shying away from choices was the best move. It just says she’s now blissfully ignorant.</p>
<p>2.</p>
<p>You posted this twenty freaking million times.</p>