I Am Sooo Bored

College Essays
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<p>That's what my essay's about: why I'm bored</p>

<p>So if anyone would like to read it that would be awesome...private message me. I would prefer if it were someone who already graduated from high school if possible. Thanks!!</p>

<p>Sneak Preview:</p>

<pre><code>The irritating alarm tolled to signal yet another tedious day of my punishment. I awakened instantaneously in an effort to evade the wrath of the warden downstairs. Rising to dress, I found the walls of my cell rapidly closing in on me. My panic heightened as my lungs futilely gasped for air. The lights flickered. My vision faded. Unconsciousness loomed imminently. Purple pillows…feather boas…my final sights.
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<p>And just so everyone knows the last paragraph applies to ND!</p>

<p>Oh and is it okay to use be-verbs and stuff like that cause this isn't really formal???</p>

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<p>i would love to take a look.</p>

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<p>Just based on your sample, I'm getting the idea that your essay is too much fancy-talk and isn't getting to the point :S</p>

<p>you can PM it to me if you want</p>

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<p>that is a lot of big words!</p>

<p>but send a PM, I'll take a look at it...college class of '12.</p>

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<p>As an adult (which your audience is) the word "bored" grates on my nerves. When one of my kids say "I'm bored" I substitute "unresourceful" and "unmotivated." So maybe "trapped" or some other unavoidable limitation (not self-inflicted) would be a better essay. Unless you work it into a self-realization not revealed in the intro.</p>