I can barely read my essay without crying... anyone want to critique?

<p>I'm looking for some input on my personal statement essay. It's almost exactly 497 words right now but I sort of want to add more but I'm not sure if it'd be bad to have too much or if it's good as is. It's very intense. any takers?</p>

<p>I am new to the website but would be more than happy to read it. I feel that my essay follows into the same sort of "intense" category as yours exchange maybe? either way. PM it over</p>

<p>I'll give it a look.</p>

<p>I'll read it..pm me it if you want.</p>

<p>I'll read it. PM me for email.</p>

<p>send !! ! ! ! i cry too</p>

<p>I'll take a look at it. pm me</p>

<p>I'd be happy to give you feedback on it, I think I could use reading a tearjerker right about now. :]</p>

<p>PM me. I want to read some personal statements.</p>