<p>My opening line for #1 was "American love to show off". That about sums up my entire essay.</p>
<p>let's rape CollegeBoard</p>
<p>Honestly, Daonlykid, I don't know about your entire essay, but from what you've posted on CC I don't think you'll get less than a 6. Your bit about the pronouns was interesting (to make it relatable) but you just didn't post enough about that here. Be comforted to know your essay was most likely above average.</p>
<p>Does anyone agree that my second essay may probably get an 8 or 9 based on the info I posted? I'm just curious to see what you think (even though it's based on just a SMALL summary of my essay). Thanks in advance :)</p>
<p>I used Illustration, Definition, and Comparison for the rhetorical modes I chose to analyze in the 2nd passage, so I didn't mention anything like diction, tone, anaphora, parallelism, etc. because I figured those were stylistic elements and not really rhetorical strategies. Anybody else use modes of discourse for Passage #2???</p>
<p>I severely fumbled time management on the essays. I ended up focusing way too much energy into the first essay's intro, and then was forced to make up the time with the rest.. no conclusions, and the last twos' body each was only one large paragraph.</p>
<p>I also left 7 blank, and was unsure about 6 MC.</p>
<p>Also, for the essays, I focused on:</p>
<h1>1 - Gaudy materialism, some major point about wealth and how this, combined with her commentary in P2 about having hunted the flamingo to the brink of distinction, showed Price's disdain for 1950s American culture, and also the intentional juxtaposition of the ornate and respectable position of the flamingoin other cultures - ancient Greece, Brazil and the Caribbeans, and somewhere else, with the cheap plastic flamingo's less esteemed place in American culture post-WWII, thus further exemplifying Price's distaste for it.</h1>
<h1>2 - short yet still pretty eloquent piece on use of repetition, parallelism, and anaphora to achieve a multitude of effects. yeah yeah, limited scope in rhetoric, but I was running out of time.</h1>
<h1>3 - had ~15 min to read/write this one, and said something about free speech today -> hyperpolarized debate that inflames woeifjowwef, disinformation, A Brave New World had warned, the overwhelming plethora of news is diluted blah blah blah, woeijfklsjlk... yeah, Kanye West would have been better.</h1>
<p>Your sounds great, easily a 7+, but its impossible to guuage without an actual essay.</p>
<p>How about mine?</p>
<h1>1</h1>
<p>Detail selection & diction- Americans love to show off their opulence (Elvis). Words like "pizazz" and "leisure" to describe the flamingos. I also drew the connection between the wealth of the hotels and casinos with the lawn flamingos. I said For American's, lawn flamingos are like peacok's feathers: symbols of status and power. Americans use them because they are symbols of wealth and prosperity.</p>
<h1>3</h1>
<p>I qualified it, used Bono and F.D.R. for pro, Hitler and McCarthy for con.</p>
<p>Any opinions?</p>
<p>No Evil<em>Asian</em>Dictator!! I mean, it's fine to use modes of discourse, but those other terms you mentioned could DEFINITELY have been used - they constitute rhetorical devices!! In my opinion, a discussion on the modes of discourse w/o touching upon the rhetorical devices (emotional appeal, parallel sentence structure, etc..) is probably gonna be graded a little harshly. Idk though, I haven't seen the rubric for it yet (which comes out sometime later this year).</p>
<p>Darkruler II, if your last post was in response to my post, then THANKS! I really hope I got at least a 7 on all my essays (though I think I probably got a 6 or 7 on the first one and 8's or 9's on the second two). Leaving out 16 multiple choice questions, but getting about 32 of the 38 I did do correct, about what grade is that (considering the essay scores I mentioned)? I calculated it to be a very low 5 borderline extremely high 4. Any insight? If anyone has an official College Board scoring guide from a past exam, I'd appreciate it if you would post the guidelines for calculating scores. Thanks!</p>
<p>-Jon ;)</p>
<p>This is what I said:</p>
<h1>1) Symbol of opulence and conformity, consumer culturewhile the ancients worshipped the sun god, etc., Americans worshiped wealth and pizzazz.</h1>
<h1>2) As the author spent the last 10 years of his life in poverty, I did not think it was really satire. But it was exaggeration, and I did think he was bitter. Parallelism, last line of sarcasm, varied syntax, polysyndeton (or, or, or, or)</h1>
<h1>3) Wrote an essay qualifying it. 2 examples: school newspaper and pro-anorexia weblogs.</h1>
<p>Jon noooooooooooo I'm screwed then because I just quoted stuff and explained how they illustrated his main point, then I used definition to define what the author supposes that a poor person would be treated like, and finally I used comparison at the end because he changed his POV and said that money is a double-edged sword and can cause "backstabbing" even if you do get wealthy so you will be in sorrow regardless.</p>
<p>Please tell me that you can get a 8-9 on this essay without even mentioning specific stuff like parallelism, diction, or anaphora Jon!!!!:(</p>
<p>ya.. it was difficult.. lol.. thats all i have to say.. oh well.. its over.. onlyy 3 more to go..for me anyway.. :)</p>
<ol>
<li> Lastyear you needed 108/150 points to get one. You will get at least a 4, but probably a 5. What do you think about what I put?</li>
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<p>Well, evil (sounds weird calling you that, but I don't have your name - like you have mine), if you made a VERY strong case for the modes of discourse, then it definitely is possible to get an 8 (and if your writing was excellent and stylistically superior then a 9 is also possible), I just think it's less probable than if you had discussed "specific stuff."</p>
<p>Does anyone have the guidelines for calculating scores (official ones from past released exams, hopefully)?</p>
<p>Darkruler, thanks. Ahh... maybe I got just a high 4. Damn! I wish I had used my time better on the stupid MC!! Why oh WHY did I leave out the EASIEST passage (the 3rd one)?!!</p>
<p>I really like the points you brought up. I talked about symbolism as well. Without your full essay, it's hard to tell, but I'm sure you did very well overall too :)</p>
<p>Well, I thought #4 was the easiest, then #1. #2 was DEFINATELY the hardest.</p>
<p>i related the flamingo to the growth of american culture...from the great depression to later</p>
<p>For calculating the scores...</p>
<p>Section I:</p>
<p>number correct - (.25 x number wrong) = Section I raw score (don't round)</p>
<p>Section II:</p>
<p>Essay 1 score x 3.0556 = (don't round)
Essay 2 score x 3.0556 = (don't round)
Essay 3 score x 3.0556 = (don't round)</p>
<p>Essays 1+2+3 = (don't round)</p>
<p>Section I + Section II = (round to the nearest whole number)</p>
<p>I think that's how it goes</p>
<p>As for the second essay, I totally messed that up. I went along the lines of this guy was being arrogant. He definately did appeal to emotions (pathos) and used the semicolons and syntax to get across his point (which i got wrong). Somewhere in there I think I mentioned climax.</p>
<p>As for the MC, forget that. I expect a 2 coming back.</p>
<p>BTW, he was using exaggeration.</p>
<p>I strongly believe that liberal knowledge does have an effect on one's character.</p>
<p>Just wanted to point that out to y'all.;)</p>
<p>Hey, Puzzled01, where did you find those scoring guidelines? Are they official? Are you sure the MC is left unweighted?? And, my last question is, from the guidelines you posted, what is the range for a 5? Thanks in advance!</p>
<p>Yeah... I did all of the MC within the allotted time, and I think that I did pretty well. I couldn't have missed many more than ten.</p>
<p>The essays, though, could very well have kicked my butt.</p>
<ol>
<li><p>I think that I did pretty well--- hopefully a seven (or and eight?). I used a little more than forty minutes, but I think that it was worth it. I talked about the use of words like "splash" and "flocked" to enhance imagery. Talked about how she used details to show the popular opinions of the time (i.e. only gave one sentence to the whole hunting thing, immediately dismissing it). Also, used humor in order to show how she felt about the entire thing (i.e. comparing the Americans' superficiality with the power of phoenixes and the egyptian god Ra). </p></li>
<li><p>Died. Wrote on how the semicolon as punctuation gave equal emphasis to the items in the "list" or body of the editorial. This gave extra emphasis to the first and last sentences, which were antithesises of each other. The parallel structure helps to delineate where new paragraphs would be, helping to shift from one point to another with little to no transition.</p></li>
<li><p>What the heck was I thinking? I had little to no evidence or even a single point! It felt to me that I kept writing the same sentence over and over and over and over. The only thing that I could think to write about was that the government had tried to limit sedition before, and it hadn't worked. I decided to take a side, as it didn't say that you could qualify. However, I didn't think it completely through before deciding which side to take, and I chose the one with little evidence in my brain.... Oh, and I said that celebrities are too revered for their own good and that they aren't a reliable source of info. (i.e. Tom Cruise).</p></li>
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<p>What do y'all think? I have to get a four or it doesn't count....</p>
<p>EEEEK!!</p>