I need help with my personal statement

<p>Hello, </p>

<p>This is my first post here however I've been lurking and following posts religiously for the past month or so. I just made an account today because my UC app is almost ready to be sent out but my personal statements are worrying me. Would anyone with experience with the UC system's admissions process mind reading over my personal statement? I would sincerely appreciate it as I'm currently freaking out. </p>

<p>Thank you in advance,
Corsairtobruin </p>