I need people to help me critique my essay PLEASE!!!!!

<p>So the essay topic is "Explain why you have chosen to obtain a degree in engineering. Discuss any experiences you may have had and/or people you have known who influenced your decision" I need some feedback and see if it's appropriate? This doesn't need to be a self reflective essay according to the application. Thanksssss!</p>

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