I need some quick advice!!!! Just 2 mins

<p>My first sentence in my common says: "I used to hate my grandparents". A couple ppl I talked to said they liked it but my mom said that if she read it, she would throw it straight into the reject pile. In the essay, I go on to talk about how my view on old people changed, so the essay in its whole is not negative, but my mom has me stressing out. Any advice???</p>

<p>It’s provocative, will definitely get attention but possibly will make a bad first impression. I would recommend not starting with such a negative statement.
I would be happy to review it in context if you wish to PM it to me.</p>

<p>Why don’t you ease into with a more general statement like Hate is such a strong word…an emotion not normally directed at one’s own family. Yet, I used to hate my grandparents.
@PaulPierce34‌ </p>

<p>Start it with something like “When I was a kid, I used to hate (was never fond of) my grandparents.” or “Growing up, I used to hate my grandparents.”</p>

<p>bump</p>

<p>Really?!</p>

<p>I would go for something less severe!</p>

<p>ty everyone, changed it up!</p>