<p>"the possessive of "Johns Hopkins" is "Johns Hopkins's, not Johns Hopkin's."</p>
<p>Wouldn't it be, Johns Hopkins'? I thought it was convention not to do ...s's.</p>
<p>You come across as an arrogant phony in your essays (and on this board) and combined with your low GPA/SAT, your chances are not too great.</p>
<p>Cornell now has the luxury of rejecting people for even a minor flaw in your application. I'd say your application has not only flaws but gaping holes all over it...</p>
<p>Come on, you are way too self confident? If you were too self confident, then I don't know what I would have been when I applied.</p>
<p>Even now, i think i have a decent shot at Cornell. I think we can all agree that is far too much confidence in myself. :)</p>
<p>stop defending your essays. clearly a majority of people here dont like them...so cornell wont either. start praying</p>
<p>well i dont know. I dont want to say that your essays are bad, especially after they have been sent. To be honest, the thing i liked about your essays were that you seemed straightforward. As for the "unique" and "risk" and "different" part is concerned, I saw none of it. But hey, who the heck am I to say whether your essays are good or bad; the adcom will decide. So cross your fingers. Best of Luck.</p>
<p>P.S I agree with most people that i would have expected better of a published writer.</p>
<p>Tihs is hwo I satrted my cronell esasy. I raelly thuoght taht it wsa giong to be a cmopletely unique mehtod but oen day on facebook, I swa a similra paragarph on soemone's superwall.</p>
<p>This means that prolly hundreds of other people used it in their essays and so my idea wasn't unique at all. Same goes for your method. You are trying so hard to be unique that u are being very ordinary( and at times boring ).Sorry for being so mean...</p>
<p>Anyways, you have pretty low chances but that doesn't mean 0 chances so goodluck...</p>
<p>heyy, i kind of liked the unique-ness of your essays, and i think that the fact that youre a published author WILL weigh a LOT in your favour. writing takes a LOOONG time, and i guess you may have become preoccupied with your work...</p>
<p>then again, anything i say is just a shot in the dark(:</p>
<p>by the way, what publisher published your book? im working on a novel, and im looking at people who may do it for me! haha(: and also, could you tell us the name of your novel so we can read it? what is it about?that may make a difference!</p>
<p>"the possessive of "Johns Hopkins" is "Johns Hopkins's, not Johns Hopkin's."</p>
<p>Wouldn't it be, Johns Hopkins'? I thought it was convention not to do ...s's.</p>
<p>Actually the s' is used when the noun ends in s because it is a plural (like the singers' voices). If the noun just happens to end in an s, then s's is right. As in Hopkins's.</p>
<p>Yeah you're right.</p>
<p>"In this essay, I will write about why I look forward to college. This sentence makes a generalization about the constraints High School puts on the learning environment. This next sentence segues from that statement, to a more specific one. Finally, the last one contains my thesis."</p>
<p>what sentence r u refering too. i think this is a classic example of trying too hard to be clever. </p>
<p>the sentence structures are way too simple, there are too many sentences that start with " i will " to the point that the phrase has no rhetoricall value. </p>
<p>dont even pretend like you spent more that 1 hour on each essay.</p>
<p>oh in responce to ShruggingSheep, i find that Cornell looks for class ranking and GPA more than SATs. it seems to be the pattern amoung several high schools in my area</p>
<p>Fundamental problem with first essay is it really doesn't reveal much about you as a person. You seem to be gearing up to rebel against the system. But, you got accepted to 3 schools, so what do I know? I think colleges have given up on expecting high schools to teach students grammar. You really need to learn what a sentence is, though.</p>
<p>Also, you seem to rely on the opinions of these teachers a great deal, but I went to Cornell and can assure you there's far more structure to learning in college than you seem to think. You might not have anybody forcing you to make flashcards, but by god if you're learning the names of 400 genus and species or the hundreds of different aspects of a cellular structure, those little pieces of light cardboard tend to find their way into your hands pretty quickly. You might have 2 tests a semester. You won't have the luxury of trying different learning models without risking a major hit to your grade.</p>
<p>Also, your reticence to reveal your book's title suggests perhaps it is not all that you presented it to be? Please do. I think that's amazing if you got a book actually published in high school. That right there could be all the ticket you need. Best of luck.</p>
<p>I will start off by admitting that when I first saw these essays, I was kind of neutral. They were not very good, but not too bad. However, after analyzing them thoroughly, Ive finally decided that they suck. Im even starting to doubt that you actually published a book. </p>
<p>CommunistHunter: What is the title of your book?!?!?!?!?!?!</p>
<p>3.0/3.1 GPA. This is really low, especially for Ivy League. What is your class rank?</p>
<p>Obviously, you didnt spend many weeks pondering over these essays. On the other hand, if I wrote an essay in an hour, or even 30 minutes, I wouldnt make nearly this many mistakes in punctuation and grammar. You made blatant errors in the part of your essay that was satirizing the five-paragraph format. Good job!</p>
<p>I think someone emphasized that there are editors who read through books and correct typos. I feel sorry for your editors. Were they allowed to edit content?</p>
<p>Rather than follow what is imposed on me by parents, I will be able to plot my own route through this portion of my life.</p>
<p>The five paragraph structure demands simplicity and straightforward. You could have wrote, Instead of following my parents orders, I will be able to make my own decisions. For some reason, you tried be eloquent and sophisticated in your satire (unsuccessfully), when the entire point of the satire was to mock a manner of writing that is devoid of such characteristics. Were you trying to make your satire more interesting to keep the attention of admissions officers? </p>
<p>I will have the freedom to learn what I choose to learn, and not what is set in front of me.</p>
<p>Ummmm, that comma should not be there, Mr. Bigshot Writer. The second part of the sentence is a dependent clause because, by itself, it is not a complete sentence. So, you either put a comma or a conjunction between the two clauses. If you put a , and a and, you are connecting two complete sentences, which is not the case here. You did this multiple times. </p>
<p>We are told how to format our essays; how to style every single paragraph.</p>
<p>Okay, now you are using a semicolon where you should be using a comma. </p>
<p>In this essay, I will write about why I look forward to college The first reason is freedom The second reason is freedom But the real reason is far bigger It is freedom.</p>
<p>And this I very much look forward to.</p>
<p>Following the lead of many other comments, I have to tell you, again, that this is not what colleges are looking for. An essay that stands out is an essay that describes you as a person. You are supposed to tell the reader a story, a piece of you! You are unique, so the best way to write a unique essay is to put you into it; it is not to waste time and text by concocting unique, screwed up paragraphs that dont make sense and unique incomplete sentences. </p>
<p>I will take in a college education in the most efficient way I have:
My own.</p>
<p>Uuummmm, My own is not a complete sentence. Wait a second, (gasp), are you God?</p>
<p>It is not the simple ideas described above </p>
<p>Uuummmm, yes it is. You just changed your style, nothing more. </p>
<p>I understand that this is necessary in the early years. One needs an example to understand an abstract concept, and we, as newcomers to the learning world, had to start somewhere. But I do not need to fill in a chart about why "war is bad" when I am a senior in high school. It is not the same.</p>
<p>Are you debating with the admissions officer or something? Too many argumentative essays in AP English?</p>
<p>Some boundaries must exist.</p>
<p>Really?</p>
<p>In more structured courses, Chemistry for instance, it is very important to abide by formulas. Calculus obviously has little room for creativity, unless you're stuck playing with trig identities. I have no problem following formulae when necessary.</p>
<p>What do I learn about you from this paragraph? That you use formulas in math? Yeah, so does everyone else if they want to get the right answer. Is the plural of formula, formulas or formulae? You are a rebel, so you have to spell it differently the second time?</p>
<p>I was gonna edit cornell notes out of there for cornell, but i completely forgot =P</p>
<p>You forgot?</p>
<p>The essays sounded akward, your grades aren't great, but your EC's aren't bad. Good luck.</p>
<p>Here's another thing I just noticed: because you only got a 650 on the writing section of the SAT, it can be determined that you aren't the best writer. That being said, any "mistakes" in your essays that may have been there for satirical purposes totally lose credibility, as it cannot be discerned whether you included them on purpose or as actual mistakes. Like others here, I am starting to doubt that you are a published author, but if you are...WOW. That's all I have to say.</p>
<p>Ha wow im glad i didn't post my essays for you guys to destroy.</p>
<p>I’m going to take everything apart.</p>
<p>"Anyways,CommunistHunter, I think your chances are actually above the average applicant."</p>
<p>BS </p>
<p>"With you low GPA, relatively high SAT, and a published book, I think it would show that you have a very creative mind that many of us don't have and appreciate."</p>
<p>Uuuummm, how does having a low GPA show that he is creative? Uuuummm, his SAT is below the average Cornell freshman. Kowloon, sigh...do you pity this guy so much that you want to give him extravagant praise to make him feel better or are you so out of touch with reality that you actually believe he has a good chance of getting into Cornell.</p>
<p>"Cornell notes are mandatory in some of my classes, which i'm sure even they will agree is rediculous."</p>
<p>Are you 100% sure that Cornell University thinks Cornell notes are rediculous?</p>
<p>"There are no "homeworks" and "classworks", you just learn the info."</p>
<p>Uuummm, yes there is.</p>
<p>"I've talked to my own teachers who say it's a horrible system and my essay is 100% spot on..."</p>
<p>Well, then, I'm glad I don't have your teachers.</p>
<p>"I cant possibly imagine what i'm going to do, so i'm not going to just pick something out of thin air and ramble on about how great i'd be at it."</p>
<p>Instead, you picked many different things out of thin air and rambled about how you'd be great at all of them.</p>
<p>“To be honest, the thing i liked about your essays were that you seemed straightforward.”</p>
<p>Yes, writing a satire for a college application on one essay and not having a topic on another essay is very straightforward.</p>
<p>“I don't see what's wrong with your essays... i like them.”</p>
<p>Buy a new computer!</p>
<p>“Just saying but what if the reader of your essay is a Math student who loves Calc?”</p>
<p>Uuuummm, admissions officers are usually not students. CommunistHunter likes math too; I don’t understand what the problem is. He said Calculus didn’t allow much room for creativity, which is true. It’s high school level math. </p>
<p>“All GT/AP classes since 9th grade. Currently taking 6 APs out of 6 classes.”
“Played piano for 12 years
Played tennis for 5 years
Taught tennis for 2, including summer camp and private lessons.”</p>
<p>Whether or not you have to take Cornell notes is mostly determined mostly by the teacher, not the school system. Do your AP teachers force you to take Cornell notes? That’s pretty unlikely. If they do, then why do they agree that your essay is 100% spot on? Perhaps you showed your essay to the teachers that didn’t force you to do things? Your only EC’s are piano, tennis, and “The Book.” </p>
<p>What about other activities, community service? Church? Jobs? Sports? Leadership? Looking at the circumstances, I’m guessing that your parents forced private piano lessons upon you. I’m also thinking that your parents started your tennis career. </p>
<p>You are good enough to give private lessons? How come you didn’t list any awards? Did you play tennis for your high school?</p>
<p>If you hadn’t told me, I would never have suspected that you were a rebel. Your essays contradict the rest of your application. Are you so constricted by your parents, that you can’t even breathe? </p>
<p>“i think i made the undecided thing work pretty well for me.”</p>
<p>No you didn’t! What the ****? I’m so confused. This doesn’t make any sense. How could you have written a book? Why won’t you tell anybody the title of it?????????</p>
<p>^ Woah. Your two posts like took up this whole page. You need to calm down and stop destroying this poor kid's self esteem.</p>
<p>Good luck to the OP.</p>
<p>jesus christ, is this thread still going?</p>
<p>Get over yourselves already. You dont like the essays, you dont think i have a shot, that's great. Do you really need to repeat it for 2 weeks straight?</p>
<p>I published a book. It was not self published; i paid nothing at all for it to happen. I was in middle school. Did I ever say it was a prize winning work of fiction? No. Did I even say it was even particularly good, when it was published by a 13 year old kid? No. It was published by a genuine publisher and is available online and that is all I ever said. I see no reason to give you the name judging from what's gone on after simply posting two essays.</p>
<p>I'm not going to argue anything that was said because there really isn't any point. All I can say is i'm really surprised how this thread turned out, and I guess it says alot about the people who posted in it.</p>
<p>I hope you all had fun? =/</p>
<p>Well, it's definitely entertaining to make fun of a pompous high school prick. </p>
<p>You seem to be implying that you don't care what people think of you, yet you make a post on a public forum saying that you are way too confident.</p>
<p>You're a quirky piece of ****, for sure, I'll give you that much. Here's to hoping for a very likely outcome of your ass getting rejected come April.</p>
<p>I suggest that everyone let this thread die. </p>
<p>Do not post after this post. Anyone who does will be considered an idiot through the eyes of the college confidential community.........</p>