Is this a good subject?

College Essays
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<p>I wrote an essay about my visit to an orphanage in Vietnam. I was only there for a couple of hours, but it's probably an experience I won't forget. My essay gives a rather blunt, incisive portrait of the smells and the colors and stuff. When my dad read the first line, his eyes widened and he actually physically recoiled and said "woah".</p>

<p>Would this be an appropriate essay subject? </p>

<p>Otherwise, I have another essay which describes the influence of my Art History teacher, who has made me see the beauty in daily life, and has made me change my definition of a work of art. I give examples of how one of Picasso's paintings and one of Dostoievsky's books fill that category, and the questions they made me ask myself.</p>

<p>If it helps, I'm applying to:
Yale
Brown
Vassar
Wesleyan
Middlebury
Bard
Mount Holyoke</p>

<p>Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!</p>

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<p>hey im from Vietnam:) well i think that’s obviously something you can write about,but it really depends on how you do it.</p>

<p>i dont hv any idea bout Art:"></p>

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<p>Thank you for your input!
Does anyone else have any advice? I’m getting kind of desperate here.</p>

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<p>The topic comes second to how it has shaped you. As long as the essay is vivid, uses great imagery, and describes how it has affected you in a profound way it will be great.</p>

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<p>Hmmm…
The Vietnam essay is certainly vivid and uses very effective imagery, but I’m not sure if it really says how it affected me. I mean, I say that at first it, quite bluntly, reeks. Then I change my view of orphanages and misery. I expected to see all these miserable waifs, but they are in fact extremely happy and produce beautiful works of art. I’m impressed at how optimistic they can all be despite their circumstances, and don’t even notice the smell anymore.
The art one describes my art teacher’s influence on me, and is relatively well-imaged. Not vivid though - it’s not even a narrative.</p>