<p>I was wondering if this essay deserves a 12. Looking back at it now, I don't think it's that great.</p>
<p>Here's the prompt,</p>
<p>Many people think that success is impossible without help and support from others. They believe that even the strongest and most successful leaders need advisers to define their goals, and followers to carry out their plans. Real success, however, cannot be claimed by those who need others to solve their problems and help them confront obstacles. Only those whose accomplishments are truly their own can claim to be successful.</p>
<p>Assignment:</p>
<p>Is real success achieved only by people who accomplish goals and solve problems on their own? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.</p>
<p>MY ESSAY:</p>
<p>People always praise the people who have worked on a problem on their own without outside help. This belief is misguided. People often take a simplistic view; they think when a person has accomplished something by his own, he must have extensive knowledge. When a group accomplishes a project, people think that they have little talent because they need each other’s help. But working in groups leads to real success.</p>
<p>In Kim Yong-Moo’s “Groups”, a young girl, Nicole, is a reclusive girl who wants to do everything on her own. She thinks that getting help from others is “childish”, and she mocks those who choose to rely on others. When she is assigned a project, she chooses to work on the own, even when the teacher encourages her to work with others. Because of this need to accomplish everything herself, she often turns in poorly done work. Because her parents demand she get straight A’s, she is often stressed working out every detail on her own. She continues to work this way until she gets mediocre grades at the end of the school semester. Her parents become outraged and ostracise her severely. She is beaten, tortured, until she begins to see no hope for herself. Because of her desire to be perceived as a strong person by doing everything herself, she despairs and commits suicide.</p>
<p>My friend, Joseph, is very similar to Nicole. When he first enrolled in my school, he tried to do everything himself, not because he wanted to be perceived as a strong person, but because he didn’t want to be a burden on everyone by having them research facts for him. So when my teacher gave us assignments, he became very stressed from running from library to library to make his work the best in our class. But when he ended up with an average grade, he began to question his belief. Seizing the opportunity, my fellow classmates and I assured him that because we are in the same class together, we must help and guide one another. He soon began to see the error of his ways and began to accept help. Once he did, he became happier and got straight A’s.</p>
<p>That is why success is achieved only when someone chooses to work with others. Everyone has their faults, so by working together, the members of the group can help do a certain thing when another is unable to. Real success is achieved when people work together.</p>
<p>I changed the names of the author and the characters,, but the essay above is exactly how I wrote it. I filled two pages with medium-sized handwriting.</p>