Can you help review and grade this SAT essay?

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<p>Many people think that success is impossible without help and support from others. They believe that even the strongest and most successful leaders need advisers to define their goals. and followers to carry out their plans. real success, however, cannot be claimed by those who need others to solve their problems and help them confront obstacles. Only those whose accomplishments are truly their own can claim to be successful.
Assignment:Is real success achieved only by people who accomplish goals and solve problems on their own? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning....</p>

<p>ESSAY:
Although many people believe that real success can only be achieved alone, there are an abundance of reasons that I disagree, I believe real success is defined by whether you fully achieved your goal or not. I think that it does not matter how much you are boosted and helped by your friends, as long as you reach what you wanted to achieve.
One of the reasons that give me this opinion is that the entire reason you are working is to achieve success. Does it matter how much help you receive along the way? In my opinion, the greatest achievements importance is only measured by how significant and successful the goal is after it is achieved.
Another reason that supports my point of view is that everybody make mistakes. If you achieved a goal by yourself, the result could be less successful than if you did it with help. Did Thomas Edison invent the light bulb himself? NO. He had many minions working with and for him. But does this make his invention any less significant and successful? I disagree.
The final reason I present to you is that the path of the goal would be much easier if someone was willing to help you. If you were stuck on the path to your goal, having a helping hand (perhaps a trusty parent or friend) would help you.
These reasons I have presented support why I feel that true success is not performed as a solo. It is no less satisfying knowing you have achieved a goal with someone else than alone. True success is measured by how much you accomplished your goal.</p>

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<p>Can you give me your comments?</p>

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<p>any comments,pls</p>

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<p>It is my son’s first SAT essay. I don’t know to to grade it.</p>

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<p>He is in 7th grade</p>

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<p>4/12
Not bad for a 7th grader… the thing is he’s used to writing differently than the sat
School writing is mostly about opinions and persuasive writing but the real sat is more about evidence
First of all unless a personal example is included try to avoid first person
Intro and conclusion are fine just try to be more formal
Not much evidence to support his ideas just arguing which is bad
Organization and transition is a little off
Grammar and spelling is fine</p>

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<p>Thanks Swiftyfan13x.
Then he got 540(C)/640(M)/490(W) in mock. He is preparing for DUKE TIP.</p>