I've Got Two App Essays...Which is Better?

<p>I've written two essays that can be used for the Common App. They both deal with prompt number one, "...significant experience, effect on me..." Would anyone be willing to read them both and tell me which is better, or at least more tuned toward the addcoms who will be reading them?</p>

<p>Like many other anxious seniors posting on this site a week before many applications are due, I would very much appreciate some feedback.</p>

<p>Thanks!
-SamClemens</p>