<p>I hated that prompt - finished my essay with either 3-4 paragraphs literally right before my proctor called time. Seems like you had decent response, I argued the opposite way for mine though.</p>
<p>@ captainfrost, what do you mean decent…</p>
<p>i think i really screwed up the essay… i had the prompt about fairness in society; i said no. example 1: communism/historical record of collapse and revolt. example 2: upton sinclair’s “the jungle,” shows the negative sides of capitalism which americans regard as the opposite of communism, the fairest economic system, the best way to run a society, etc. idk though i might not have elaborated enough? like i know what i was trying to say, but i don’t know if it’ll come across to the graders…</p>
<p>I did communism vs. capitalism and how neither is entirely fair to all of society. I’m just worried that I used the word equality more than I did fair. Also, it was only 4 paragraphs (including the intro and conclusion, and the latter was only like 3 sentences long). I thought it was a pretty good essay, but then again, my Woodrow Wilson essay on details got an 8.</p>
<p>Anybody think my essay is wrong…</p>
<p>There is no such thing as a wrong essay, just one that is unsubstantiated.</p>
<p>@smarty you did fine. You’ll probably get a 9-10 i suppose.
I had the same topic and I wrote about gandhi and women’s suffrage.
I kept emphasizing that history is more valuable than pop culture and that you couldn’t learn the things you do with history with pop culture.
You think i stayed on topic?</p>
<p>I had the society prompt and was really happy with it! I disagreed and said no, it’s impossible.
In my intro I talked about the Declaration of Independence
P1- History and Politics, examples African Americans (Slavery, Civil Rights Act, still racism and discrimination today), Women (Suffrage, ERA), Gay Marriage
P2- How in life always someone better than you, someone has to be the best, all the same life would be dull, no one would be unique or special.
I got an 8 in March and that was my first SAT and didn’t have that much experience with the essay, but now I think I can get a 9 or 10. June 20th come quickly!</p>
<p>I said no to the fair society one. Okay so I did the impracticality of communism as well. I feel like my score may be lowered simply because everyone chose my example as well, therefore destroying the uniqueness of my essay. I also talked about “Anthem” by Ayn Rand and how our inherent individualism counters all ideas of true equality and fairness. Also talked about the subjectivity of fairness. Hoping I got at least a 10</p>
<p>Aw ****, here you guys are with your big complicated examples and I wrote my essay about Jeremy lin
There goes my score</p>
<p>@oldschoolboy, yes… Those examples are better than mine XD as long as you didn’t write 3 paragraphs & with those examples, your score would be high enough. I wrote like a page and a half (4 paragraphs) & I talked about Scarlet Letter & said how that emphasized feminist and is scandalous… Idk if that’s on topic though :/</p>
<p>@smarty okay basically as long as you put in a sentence rounding it back to the main topic.
Like for example i just talked about gandhi and how he brought peace and told indians to speak with words and then i added like 2 sentences saying how this lesson cannot be taught with popular culture. </p>
<p>And with women’s suffrage i talked about the women activists who helped the 19th amendment get passed. And i put it towards the topic by saying ‘popular culture cannot change people’s lives like the way the 19th amendment and these women did’</p>
<p>So as long as you did that you should be good.
I wrote all 2 pages…
Yeah i’m pretty certain you will get a 9. 8 or 9. Let me know what you get when you get your scores!</p>
<p>@oldschoolboy, you’re gonna get a 12! Those are good! Yeah I tied my examples to the prompt… But i didn’t have enough time to finish the whole 2 pages. For sure, I’ll tell you my score :)</p>
<p>So I had the pop. culture one and I didn’t use any specific examples (as in examples of real events)…</p>
<p>My first paragraph after my intro was basically asserting that all areas of study have equal merits. I used the example that we would think it was crazy for a mathematician to criticize a historian for his area of study, because we recognize that they have similar merits. I continued to say that all areas of study are motivated by the same basic principle of understanding more about the world, with pop. culture being no different, (I used an Emerson quote in the intro that I harkened to here, along the lines of, "It is not the action you take that matters but place from which you proceed). </p>
<p>My second body paragraph was about how history and pop. culture can both teach you things about the modern world, but I didn’t use any explicit examples…</p>
<p>I furthered my points about how different areas of study are all motivated by the same goals, but I didn’t use any more explicit examples through the rest of the paper.</p>
<p>I did use the full two pages but I spent a lot of time talking about the mathematician and the historian, not a lot of time on other examples. I made a lot of generalizations to the equality of various areas of study and their importance to man’s understanding of the world, including himself…</p>
<p>Anyways long story long I didn’t use many explicit examples… What can I expect, like an 8?</p>
<p>@nwskiet damn you know the readers hate when you don’t pick one side.
Did you stick to one side?
Cause it looks like you talked about both and didn’t really pick a slide…</p>
<p>Oh no I had a clear thesis and I reiterated my position of being pro-pop. culture education.</p>
<p>Yeah then you’ll get either an 8 or 9.</p>
<p>hey guys can you guys look at my examples i chose for the society one? post #12…im really worrying i didnt use good examples or if it even made sense…thx</p>
<p>I had the society one as well.
For my first example, I talked about my cousin getting into Notre Dame because he knew a large benefactor at Notre Dame, while his girlfriend did not. His girlfriend was more qualified than him, demonstrating that people are born with opportunities that create an uneven, and thus unfair, playing field.
For my second example, I discussed how my mother was born into wealth - her college was paid for and her job lined up for her after college. I then talked about her friend Marissa who was equally as smart but had to go to community college for financial reasons. Although Marissa has since achieved similar levels of success, her journey was much harder because she was not born with the same opportunities.</p>
<p>I wrote like a page and a half and included this in four paragraphs. Not very confident about my score.</p>
<p>@meghanelizabeth I think so long as you related these examples to whether or not it is possible for society to treat everyone fairly (as opposed to does society treat everyone fairly), I think you should be fine</p>